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Some people think that people should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own experience. v.2

Some people think that people should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 2
Being good members of society is extremely important and the one who learns that from childhood is the one that excels, in my opinion. The contrasting beliefs of people are indispensable and I think that both parents and school members are equally responsible for achieving that. School is the place where a lot of interactions take place. As people are good at learning from others, children will have the chance to gain some good behavioral knowledge from their friends and teachers in school. To learn from other' s mistakes and failures, school is a great place. As children with bad characters will be punished in school, other children will perceive from that act that it is wrong. Even if it is not taught through punishments, a reward to a best, wise child might increase the impulses of other children to act in the right direction. As humans basically have these guilty consciences right from birth, schools can use these kinds of personalities that is inside everyone and tune it right from a child' s birth, as school is where children will face many people and feel awkward when something wrong they did gets exposed. Parents have an equal role to play in children' s lives as schools do. As children learn from other children in school, it takes at least one parent to make their child set an example for other children. It all starts at home and continues through school. If parents use abusive language or talk about negative matters in front of the children, kids will also develop those characters unknowingly. For example, my sister' s son, who recently went to school for just kinder garden, is so talkative that it tires us. He has learned to use colloquial words which are funny, but when he uses it on elders, it sounds disrespectful. It was all because of that one parent who failed to teach his child. But, as my sister and school equally took up the job and continuously advised my nephew against it, he is not behaving badly now. In conclusion, it takes both parents and schools effort to make a child become responsible and make a child mingle with better manners. So, neither parents nor school can do it separately as people believe.
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good
members of society is
extremely
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important
and the one who learns that from childhood is the one that excels, in my opinion. The contrasting beliefs of
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people
are indispensable and I
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think
that both
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parents
and
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school
members are
equally
responsible for achieving that.

School is the place where
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a lot of
interactions take place. As
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people
are
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good
at learning from others,
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children
will have the chance to gain
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some
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good
behavioral knowledge from their friends and teachers in
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school
. To learn from
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other&
#039; s mistakes and failures,
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school
is a great place. As
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children
with
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bad
characters will
be punished
in
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school
,
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other
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children
will perceive from that act that it is
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wrong
. Even if it is not taught through punishments, a reward to
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a
best, wise
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child
might increase the impulses of
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other
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children
to act in the right direction. As humans
basically
have these guilty consciences right from birth,
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schools
can
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use
these kinds of personalities
that is
inside everyone and tune it right from a
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child&
#039; s birth, as
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school
is where
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children
will face
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many
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people
and feel awkward when something
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wrong
they did
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gets
exposed.

Parents have an equal role to play in
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children&
#039; s
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lives
as
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schools
do. As
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children
learn from
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other
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children
in
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school
, it takes at least one
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parent
to
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make
their
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child
set an example for
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other
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children
. It all
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starts
at home and continues through
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school
. If
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parents
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use
abusive language or talk about
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negative
matters in front of the
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children
, kids will
also
develop those characters
unknowingly
.
For example
, my
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sister&
#039; s son, who recently went to
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school
for
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just
kinder garden, is
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so
talkative that it tires us. He has learned to
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use
colloquial words which are
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funny
,
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but
when he
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uses
it on elders, it sounds disrespectful. It was all
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because
of that one
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parent
who failed to teach his
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child
.
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But
, as my sister and
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school
equally
took up the job and
continuously
advised my nephew against it, he is not behaving
badly
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now
.

In conclusion
, it takes both
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parents
and
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schools
effort to
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make
a
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child
become responsible and
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make
a
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child
mingle with better manners.
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So
, neither
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parents
nor
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school
can do it
separately
as
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people
believe.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that people should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
378 words
6.0
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