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Some people think that people should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own experience. v.1

Some people think that people should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 1
The majority of the population is moving in metro cities, small towns and other industrial area in order to get jobs, instead of farming. It will definitely result in severe effects on the farming such as, the land loss due to salt formation, food shortage etc. However, by educating people about the new agricultural techniques, its financial aspects and career prospects will be the best resolution diverting people to start farming again. Nowadays, an agriculture importance in young youth is reducing day by day due to its lower income as well as it demands extra efforts to cultivate the land. As a result, farms which are not utilized for agricultural purpose are started forming salt on the upper layer. In addition to this, people are moving away from the agriculture, causing a huge amount of the food shortage. For example, in reference to annual agricultural report 2015, published by the Government of Maharashtra clearly expounds that, 15% food shortage had registered and imported foodstuff from outside countries to compensate public needs. Nevertheless, these problems will be resolved by educating people about new techniques, new hybrid crops which are able to produce more food and its economic importance in accordance with career growth. These all solutions will definitely convince most of the population in order to initiate their land irrigation. For example, The Delhi University had taken initiative to teach people about new types of crops, its economic facts and long run benefits that will balance their life. This helped around 5 million people around the country. To conclude, most people think getting job by relocating in cities is piece of cake as compare to farming but it has its own disadvantages too. However, this problem has a solution to deal and divert people to start the farming
The majority of the population is moving in metro cities,
small
towns and other industrial area in order to
get
jobs,
instead
of
farming
. It will definitely result in severe effects on the
farming
such as, the land loss due to salt formation,
food
shortage etc.
However
, by educating
people
about the
new
agricultural techniques, its financial aspects and career prospects will be the best resolution diverting
people
to
start
farming
again.

Nowadays, an agriculture importance in young youth is reducing day by day due to its lower income
as well
as it demands extra efforts to cultivate the land.
As a result
, farms which are not utilized for agricultural purpose are
started
forming salt on the upper layer.
In addition
to this,
people
are moving away from the agriculture, causing a huge amount of the
food
shortage.
For example
, in reference to annual agricultural report 2015, published by the
Government
of Maharashtra
clearly
expounds that, 15%
food
shortage had registered and imported foodstuff from outside countries to compensate public needs.

Nevertheless
, these problems will
be resolved
by educating
people
about
new
techniques,
new
hybrid crops which are able to produce more
food
and its economic importance in accordance with career growth. These all solutions will definitely convince most of the population in order to initiate their land irrigation.
For example
, The Delhi University had taken initiative to teach
people
about
new
types of crops, its economic facts and long run benefits that will balance their life. This
helped
around 5 million
people
around the country.

To conclude
, most
people
think
getting job by relocating in cities is piece of cake as compare to
farming
but
it has its
own
disadvantages too.
However
, this problem has a solution to deal and divert
people
to
start
the
farming
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IELTS essay Some people think that people should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
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