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some people think that paying taxes is enough to use society, others argue that being a citizen involved more responsibilities. discuss what is your opinion. v.1

some people think that paying taxes is enough to use society, others argue that being a citizen involved more responsibilities. discuss what is your opinion. v. 1
Lifestyle has undergone dramatic changes over a couple of decades. Presently, some proportion of masses believe that paying taxes is an amazing contribution towards the society. By contrast, other says that it is not the particular solutions to make society better for masses so people should do more fire society. Here, I would like to account both the view points with my own perception. Manifold points are there to support the former view. First and foremost. Administrative provide services to society by collecting taxes for masses. To illustrate, government use these taxes in distinct fields such as education, health and many others which are lucrative for society. Apart from it, people who are working under the ownership of government receive pay through this taxes and serve their service to the people of society. Thus, taxes which are collected by folks contribute remarkably to uplift the standard of society. On the other side, people have conflicting views. To begin with, people should take some responsibility for society rather than just paying taxes. For example, in society there are numerous bad Custom such as dowry system, female foeticide, violence against women, are available. So, people must take some appropriate steps about the these problems and try to make peaceful society. Furthermore, environment contamination are rising day by day. Therefore, people should use environment friendly things for making pollution free society. What is more, kidnapping, rape case, are worrying concern for society. Masses should rise their voice for this evil. Hence, all these steps by individuals can make society a better place for living. To recapitulate, Undeniably, both sides have their own significance. However, still I believe that everyone must think to remove those things in the community which are present for decades and effect people living.
Lifestyle has undergone dramatic
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changes
over a couple of decades.
Presently
,
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some
proportion of masses believe that paying
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taxes
is an amazing contribution towards the
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society
. By contrast, other says that it is not the particular solutions to
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make
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society
better for masses
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so
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people
should do more fire
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society
. Here, I would like to account both the view points with my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
perception.

Manifold points are there to support the former view.
First
and foremost. Administrative provide services to
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society
by collecting
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taxes
for masses. To illustrate,
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government
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use
these
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taxes
in distinct fields such as education, health and
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many
others which are lucrative for
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society
. Apart from it,
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people
who are working under the ownership of
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government
receive pay through
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this
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taxes
and serve their service to the
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people
of
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society
.
Thus
,
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taxes
which
are collected
by folks contribute
remarkably
to uplift the standard of
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society
. On the other side,
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people
have conflicting views.

To
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begin
with,
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people
should take
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some
responsibility for
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society
rather
than
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just
paying
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taxes
.
For example
, in
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society
there are numerous
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bad
Custom such as dowry system, female
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foeticide
, violence against women, are available.
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So
,
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people
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must
take
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some
appropriate steps about the these problems and try to
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make
peaceful
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society
.
Furthermore
, environment contamination are rising day by day.
Therefore
,
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people
should
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use
environment friendly things for making pollution free
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society
.
What is more
, kidnapping, rape case, are worrying concern for
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society
. Masses should rise their voice for this evil.
Hence
, all these steps by individuals can
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make
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society
a better place for living.

To recapitulate,
Undeniably
, both sides have their
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own
significance.
However
,
still
I believe that everyone
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must
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think
to remove those things in the community which are present for decades and effect
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people
living.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that paying taxes is enough to use society, others argue that being a citizen involved more responsibilities. discuss what is your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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