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some people think that newspaper are the best media to learn and get information from while others believe that the internet is a better source discuss both views and give your own opinion v.2

some people think that newspaper are the best media to learn and get information from while others believe that the internet is a better source 2
Technology has turned the whole world into a small village. Presently, some proportion of masses assert that learning information by reading newspaper is better than other sources. By contrast, others prefer more internet for information. Here, I would like to account both the view points with my own perception. Manifold points are there to support my point of view. First and foremost, getting information through newspaper is more cheaper and reliable. For example, unlike internet news, newspaper cost is less and people can get information of their own living area by reading local newspaper while internet confer information related to whole world. Moreover, receiving information through newpaper is easy method for grey generation. To illustrate, old people are unfamiliar with electronic gadgets. They like to read newspaper for information instead of using internet. Apart from it, collecting information with newspaper is lucrative for health. To demonstrate, using internet for information can creates some health issues such as week eyesight, headache and many others. Therefore, newspaper is the fabulous source for getting information. On the other side, others have conflicting views. To begin with, internet provide audio vedio facility which makes information more effective. To be specific, masses can not only read information through internet but also watch the whole scenario which helps them to understand the information clearly. Furthermore, internet provide wide range of information in distinct fields such as amusement, sports, business where folks can watch according to choice. What is more, people are unable to read newspapers due to hectic schedule so they can read information through internet anywhere anytime. Thus, internet is the outstanding source for searching information. To recapitulate, Undeniably, both sides have their own significant. However, still I believe that getting information through internet is the need of an hour in this busiest life.
Technology has turned the whole world into a
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small
village.
Presently
,
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some
proportion of masses assert that learning
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information
by reading
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newspaper
is better than
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other
sources. By contrast, others prefer more internet for
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information
. Here, I would like to account both the view points with my
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own
perception.

Manifold points are there to support my point of view.
First
and foremost, getting
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information
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through
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newspaper
is
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more cheaper
and reliable.
For example
, unlike internet news,
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newspaper
cost is less and
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people
can
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get
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information
of their
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own
living area by reading local
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newspaper
while internet confer
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information
related to whole world.
Moreover
, receiving
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information
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through
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newpaper
is easy method for
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grey
generation. To illustrate,
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old
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people
are unfamiliar with electronic gadgets. They like to
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read
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newspaper
for
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information
instead
of using internet. Apart from it, collecting
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information
with
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newspaper
is lucrative for health. To demonstrate, using internet for
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information
can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "create"
creates
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some
health issues such as week eyesight, headache and
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many
others.
Therefore
,
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newspaper
is the fabulous source for getting
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information
. On the
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other
side, others have conflicting views.

To
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begin
with, internet provide audio
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vedio
facility which
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makes
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information
more effective. To be specific, masses can not
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only
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read
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information
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through
internet
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but
also
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watch
the whole scenario which
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helps
them to understand the
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information
clearly
.
Furthermore
, internet provide wide range of
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information
in distinct fields such as amusement, sports, business where folks can
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watch
according to choice.
What is more
,
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people
are unable to
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read
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newspapers
due to hectic schedule
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so
they can
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read
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information
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through
internet anywhere anytime.
Thus
, internet is the outstanding source for searching information.

To recapitulate,
Undeniably
, both sides have their
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own
significant.
However
,
still
I believe that getting
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information
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through
internet is the need of an hour in this busiest life.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that newspaper are the best media to learn and get information from while others believe that the internet is a better source 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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