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Some people think that paying tax is their only duty while others believe that we have more responsibilities towards society. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.4

Some people think that paying tax is their only duty while others believe that we have more responsibilities towards society. v. 4
While it is believed by some that citizens are only responsible for tax payment, others argue that they are supposed to do more for their societies. In my opinion, I believe that people are responsible for way more than just paying taxes. On the one hand, some people argue that paying tax is the only duty citizens have for many reasons. Firstly, taxes help governments with funding crucial services such as, health care, education, and social security. For instance, many countries that charge high taxes provide free education to its citizens. Secondly, money from taxes is also spent on developing public transports, highways, railroads, and other facilities that make life easier and more convenient for individuals. Countries that do not charge taxes, like many underdeveloped countries, do not offer comfortable city life for its citizens, therefore, the importance of paying taxes. On the other hand, it is believed by others that people are obliged to do more than just pay taxes, and I agree. As humans, we cannot live alone, therefore, we are supposed to help other people in our society in order for countries to prosper and societies to be harmonious. If citizens were selfish and apathetic towards each other, there would be no chance for cooperation and as a result, societies would become fragmented and toxic. Furthermore, people ought to be aware of the environmental issues around them because awareness promotes action which, consequently, leads to change. In other words, if people feel responsible for the environment, they would adapt environmentally friendly lifestyles such as, walking or cycling instead of using cars, eliminating plastics, and planting more trees. In conclusion, despite people having different perspectives, I think that citizens have many responsibilities others than paying taxes including helping each other and caring for the environment.
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by
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citizens
are
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only
responsible for
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tax
payment, others argue that they
are supposed
to do more for their
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societies
. In my opinion, I believe that
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people
are responsible for way more than
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just
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paying
taxes.

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some
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people
argue that
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paying
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tax
is the
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only
duty
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citizens
have for
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many
reasons.
Firstly
,
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taxes
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help
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governments
with funding crucial services such as, health care, education, and social security.
For instance
,
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many
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countries
that charge high
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taxes
provide free education to its
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citizens
.
Secondly
, money from
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taxes
is
also
spent on developing public transports, highways, railroads, and
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other
facilities that
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make
life easier and more convenient for individuals.
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Countries
that do not charge
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taxes
, like
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many
underdeveloped
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countries
, do not offer comfortable city life for its
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citizens
,
therefore
, the importance of
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paying
taxes.

On the
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other
hand, it
is believed
by others that
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people
are obliged
to do more than
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just
pay
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taxes
, and I
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agree
. As humans, we cannot
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live
alone,
therefore
, we
are supposed
to
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help
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other
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people
in our
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society
in order for
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countries
to prosper and
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societies
to be harmonious. If
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citizens
were selfish and apathetic towards each
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other
, there would be no chance for cooperation and
as a result
,
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societies
would become fragmented and toxic.
Furthermore
,
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people
ought to be aware of the environmental issues around them
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because
awareness promotes action which,
consequently
, leads to
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change
. In
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other
words, if
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people
feel responsible for the environment, they would adapt
environmentally
friendly lifestyles such as, walking or cycling
instead
of using cars, eliminating plastics, and planting more trees.

In conclusion
, despite
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people
having
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different
perspectives, I
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think
that
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citizens
have
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many
responsibilities others than
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paying
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taxes
including helping each
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other
and caring for the environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that paying tax is their only duty while others believe that we have more responsibilities towards society. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7.5
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