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• Some people think that paying tax is their only duty while others believe that we have more responsibilities towards society. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.3

• Some people think that paying tax is their only duty while others believe that we have more responsibilities towards society. v. 3
People have different approach towards contribution to the society. Some may assume that only tax paying is enough service to the country. However, some folks think that they should have more responsibility for the nation and society. I will discuss both views to form an opinion. On one hand, some citizens argue that paying a levy is their mere liability towards the country. Taxes help a government to the funding of different services such as, Healthcare, education and a defense mechanism. Firstly, paying a tax brings new version of the country towards you, because of your assistance to the nation keep a country stronger than ever before. Secondly, some of the countries provide free education to children. For example, Canada gives free primary education due to charging extra taxes. Some underdeveloped countries did not charge taxes, because of these citizens do not get essential services. Some individuals do not pay taxes and that’s a felony. Those people have lethargic behavior and with this kind of behavior country become underdeveloped. On the other side, Countries spent money from taxes on buildings, hospitals and on other inevitable resources. Therefore, importance of paying tax is necessary. On the other hand, paying tax it’s not our only undertaking. To create a peaceful and convenient region, citizens should aid to the community. If citizens were selfish and self-obsessed, there would be no chance of recuperating a co-operating and harmonious situation. In other words, if people feel responsible for nation they should do their bit through many ways like, environment, healthcare. They should encourage people through climate awareness programs. These are every individual’s liability for the nation. Hence, if we help a bit, a country provides you a lot more. In conclusion, despite people having different opinions, but in my perspective, not only paying a tax is our duty. To do a little bit extra creates a prosperous life and brings happiness towards us.
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service to the
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,
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folks
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that they should have more responsibility for the
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and society. I will discuss both views to form an opinion.

On one hand,
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some
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citizens
argue that
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paying
a levy is their mere liability towards the
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country
.
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Taxes
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help
a
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to the funding of
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different
services such as, Healthcare, education and a defense mechanism.
Firstly
,
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paying
a
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brings new version of the
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country
towards you,
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of your assistance to the
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nation
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a
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country
stronger than ever
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before
.
Secondly
,
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some of the
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provide free education to children.
For example
, Canada gives free primary education due to charging extra
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taxes
.
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Some
underdeveloped
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countries
did not charge
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taxes
,
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of these
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citizens
do not
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get
essential services.
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Some
individuals do not pay
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taxes
and that’s a felony. Those
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people
have lethargic behavior and with this kind of behavior
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country
become underdeveloped. On the
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other
side,
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Countries
spent money from
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taxes
on buildings, hospitals and on
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other
inevitable resources.
Therefore
, importance of
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paying
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tax
is necessary.

On the
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other
hand,
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paying
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tax
it’s not our
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undertaking. To create a peaceful and convenient region,
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citizens
should aid to the community. If
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citizens
were selfish and self-obsessed, there would be no chance of recuperating a co-operating and harmonious situation. In
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other
words, if
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people
feel responsible for
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nation
they should do their bit through
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many
ways like, environment, healthcare. They should encourage
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people
through climate awareness programs. These are every individual’s liability for the
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nation
.
Hence
, if we
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help
a bit, a
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country
provides you a lot more.

In conclusion
, despite
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having
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opinions,
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in my perspective, not
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only
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paying
a
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is our duty. To do a
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little bit
extra creates a prosperous life and brings happiness towards us.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay • Some people think that paying tax is their only duty while others believe that we have more responsibilities towards society. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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