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Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 6
There are several threats to living in our environment. This has led to some individuals to say that increasing the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles like trucks or buses, is the most effective method to solve many of the environmental problems. I completely agree with this view. The reasons for my opinion will be discussed below. To start with, some people do not believe that increasing the charge on the fuel used by motor vehicles is an appropriate way to combat the challenges we face in our surrounding. Their major reason is that this approach will make life unbearable for the poor who perceive it as the cheapest mode of transportation. Similarly, only the rich could afford to buy or use the expensive alternatives for travel. For example, most income earners in developing nations such as Nigeria, commute by car or by bus. So any plan to increase the fuel price will restrcit their travel experience. However, I disagree with this view as it does not consider the damaging effect it has on the environment in the long run. Admittedly, there are basic reasons why I believe that a hike in the price of fuel for automobiles will go a long way to solve many of the problems we encounter in our environment. Firstly, it will reduce the number of such vehicles on our road. Consequently, there will be less pollution in the atmosphere as the amount of carbon monoxide, which is the major threat to life, released into the air is greatly minimised. Additionally, commuters will no longer experience traffic congestion. Secondly, it will promote the invention of vehicles that use other energy sources such as electricity or solar energy which are environmentally friendly. For instance, most people in developed countries like China, use electric cars and encourage the use of bicycles for short distance travel. This has helped to reduce climate change in their environment. In conclusion, I agree that a rise in the cost of fuel for cars or buses will discourage its use and encourage people to seek better alternatives. This is the best approach that should be adopted to deal with the difficulties in our environment.
There are several threats to living in our
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environment
. This has led to
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some
individuals to say that increasing the price of
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fuel
for
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cars
and other
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vehicles
like trucks or buses, is the most effective method to solve
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many
of the environmental problems. I completely
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agree
with this view. The reasons for my opinion will
be discussed
below.

To
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start
with,
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some
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people
do not believe that increasing the charge on the
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fuel
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used
by motor
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vehicles
is an appropriate way to combat the challenges we face in our surrounding. Their major reason is that this approach will
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make
life unbearable for the poor who perceive it as the cheapest mode of transportation.
Similarly
,
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only
the rich could afford to
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buy
or
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use
the expensive alternatives for travel.
For example
, most income earners in developing nations such as Nigeria, commute by
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car
or by bus.
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So
any plan to increase the
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fuel
price will
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restrcit
their travel experience.
However
, I disagree with this view as it does not consider the damaging effect it has on the
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environment
in the long run.

Admittedly
, there are basic reasons why I believe that a hike in the price of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
for automobiles will go a long way to solve
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of the problems we encounter in our
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environment
.
Firstly
, it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the number of such
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vehicles
on our road.
Consequently
, there will be less pollution in the atmosphere as the amount of carbon monoxide, which is the major threat to life, released into the air is
greatly
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minimised
.
Additionally
, commuters will no longer experience traffic congestion.
Secondly
, it will promote the invention of
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vehicles
that
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use
other energy sources such as electricity or solar energy which are
environmentally
friendly.
For instance
, most
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people
in
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developed countries
like China,
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use
electric
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cars
and encourage the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of bicycles for short distance travel. This has
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helped
to
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reduce
climate
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change
in their environment.

In conclusion
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that a rise in the cost of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
or buses will discourage its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
and encourage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to seek better alternatives. This is the best approach that should
be adopted
to deal with the difficulties in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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