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Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 5
Raise in population has led to increase in the usage of vehicles and environmental problems. A number of people think that, by increasing the price of fuel, problems associated with the environment can be solved. In my opinion, I agree with this view, and believe it is one of the best ways to solve majority of the environmental issues. Firstly, poisonous gases that are depleting the ozone layer, responsible for protecting harmful sunlight that warms up the earth, such as carbon-di-oxide and nitrogen is emitted by fuel burnt in the cars. Moreover, by increasing the cost of fuel, people will opt for public or other transportation services, resulting in decrease of vehicles and the emission of gases. For an instance, several developed countries have imposed higher taxes on petrol and diesel, resulting in reduction of carbon-di-oxide gas by 8% year over year. Secondly, extensive use of natural resources required in manufacturing domestic cars and trucks, caused deforestation, affecting rainfall and irregularity in climatic conditions. However, the hike in price of fuel will tend to reduce the amount of cars being purchased and increase recycling of resources. To illustrate, in India by reducing the production of cars has led to restoration of natural rainfall and overcoming several environmental issues. Government officials should come up with appropriate regulations and support for alternative mode of transportation. To sum up, raising the fuel prices will reduce the amount of unnecessary gases released into the atmosphere, and enforces the appropriate use of natural resources. Hence this might be one of the best ways in controlling environmental issues.
Raise in population has led to increase in the usage of vehicles and
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environmental
problems. A number of
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people
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think
that, by increasing the price of
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fuel
, problems associated with the environment can
be solved
. In my opinion, I
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agree
with this view, and believe it is one of the best ways to solve
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majority of
the
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environmental
issues.

Firstly
, poisonous gases that are depleting the ozone layer, responsible for protecting harmful sunlight that warms up the earth, such as
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carbon-di-oxide
and nitrogen
is emitted
by
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fuel
burnt in the
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cars
.
Moreover
, by increasing the cost of
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fuel
,
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people
will opt for public or other transportation services, resulting in decrease of vehicles and the emission of gases. For an instance, several
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developed countries
have imposed higher taxes on petrol and diesel, resulting in reduction of
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carbon-di-oxide
gas by 8% year over year.

Secondly
, extensive
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use
of natural resources required in manufacturing domestic
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cars
and trucks, caused deforestation, affecting rainfall and irregularity in climatic conditions.
However
, the hike in price of
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fuel
will tend to
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reduce
the amount of
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cars
being
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purchased
and increase recycling of resources. To illustrate, in India by reducing the production of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
has led to restoration of natural rainfall and overcoming several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
issues.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
officials should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with appropriate regulations and support for alternative mode of transportation.

To sum up, raising the
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fuel
prices will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the amount of unnecessary gases released into the atmosphere, and enforces the appropriate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of natural resources.
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Hence
this might be one of the best ways in controlling
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environmental
issues.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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