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Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 2
It is truly said that because mankind has destroyed the environment, the environment is now destroying mankind in numerous ways like the global warming, tsunami, black hole and other natural calamities. Some people suggest that one of the optimal ways to solve these problems is by increasing the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. While I agree that it would be helpful to a certain extent, but I strongly disagree that it might be the most appropriate way to protect and conserve the surroundings. The essay evaluates the reasons for disagreement. Many people are of the opinion that price rise of fuel for vehicles would refrain majority of the population from using private transport, thereby reducing the poisonous emissions of carbon monoxide and harming the environment. It would encourage the purpose of public transport or bikes for that matter, since it is a cheaper option. However the above is a form of inflation, by which the rich would become richer and the poor would become poorer. Instead of a price hike, wouldn't it be better if communities are educated? If the value of fuels reduces out of realization and not inflation? By enhancing the awareness in the society, people would utilise trains and bikes, moreover view the positives of using electric cars. If they are knowledgeable about the poisonous emissions of gases, which not only cause harm to human health in the form of respiratory diseases, but also to the nature due to depletion of the ozone layer, the use of fuel-based vehicles, I believe would greatly reduce. This environmental awareness needs to be raised amongst small villages, as well as huge cities, whereby servicing of vehicles happens at regular intervals and the engines are repaired well to not release smoke. Therefore I feel that a price raise would just be a temporary solution for the environmental issues caused by fuels. On the other hand the spread of knowledge and literacy would go miles in inculcating a sense of responsibility amongst the people. It would encourage the use of transportation that use minimum or no fuel at all, positively impacting the climate as well as the economy of the nation.
It is
truly
said that
because
mankind has
destroyed
the environment, the environment is
now
destroying mankind in numerous ways like the global warming, tsunami, black hole and other natural calamities.
Some
people
suggest that one of the optimal ways to solve these problems is by increasing the cost of
fuel
for cars and other
vehicles
. While I
agree
that it would be helpful to a certain extent,
but
I
strongly
disagree that it might be the most appropriate way to protect and conserve the surroundings. The essay evaluates the reasons for disagreement.

Many
people
are of the opinion that price rise of
fuel
for
vehicles
would refrain
majority of
the population from using private transport, thereby reducing the poisonous emissions of carbon monoxide and harming the environment. It would encourage the purpose of public transport or bikes for that matter, since it is a cheaper option.
However
the above is a form of inflation, by which the rich would become richer and the poor would become poorer.

Instead
of a price hike, wouldn't it be better if communities
are educated
? If the value of
fuels
reduces
out of realization and not inflation? By enhancing the awareness in the society,
people
would
utilise
trains and bikes,
moreover
view the positives of using electric cars. If they are knowledgeable about the poisonous emissions of gases, which not
only
cause harm to human health in the form of respiratory diseases,
but
also
to the nature due to depletion of the ozone layer, the
use
of fuel-based
vehicles
, I believe would
greatly
reduce
. This environmental awareness needs to
be raised
amongst
small
villages,
as well
as huge cities, whereby servicing of
vehicles
happens at regular intervals and the engines
are repaired
well to not release smoke.

Therefore
I feel that a price raise would
just
be a temporary solution for the environmental issues caused by
fuels
.
On the other hand
the spread of knowledge and literacy would go miles in inculcating a sense of responsibility amongst the
people
. It would encourage the
use
of transportation that
use
minimum or no
fuel
at all,
positively
impacting the climate
as well
as the economy of the nation.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
362 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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