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It is argued that mobile phones and other electronic devices have no place in the classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? v.3

It is argued that mobile phones and other electronic devices have no place in the classroom. with this view? v. 3
Nowadays, mobile phones have become very popular and easily available throughout the world. These have become a part of our everyday life. Most of the students from across the globe have access to smartphones and they have been using these electronic devices not only for educational purposes but also for personal uses. However, I believe, the mobile phones should not be allowed in classrooms, especially in primary level because it distracts the students and also affect the effective interaction. One of the main reasons for not allowing mobile phones during classes is that, it distracts the students' concentration and creates chaos in class. This causes disruption and they are found cheating on tests, taking inappropriate photographs and playing mobile games. Rather than paying attention to teachers, they are spending more time on mobile phones. As a result, they don’t understand what the topic is about, obtains poor grades in exams. For instance, during my final year of undergraduate studies, there was a good student in my batch, who failed in his favourite subject because of mobile chatting during the lecture times. So to prevent distractions caused by mobile phones, these kinds of electronic devices should be kept out of the classroom and also some rules should be followed. Another reason is a disturbance in lecture, discussion between teacher and students. Although they can browse various sites using mobile data or Wi-Fi to get the information discussed in the classroom, but they might miss the main important points and valuable advice, discussed by their teacher. In addition, they might waste too much time visiting the non-authentic sites. For instance, there are also many personal blogs and websites where the student cannot get a relevant understanding of the topic. To sum up, despite having a few pros of using the mobile devices in classrooms, they must not be allowed to use their cell phones so that in the future this can help them in achieving better results and build bright career. Furthermore, this also maintains a better learning and teaching environment for both the students and teachers.
Nowadays, mobile
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phones
have become
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very
popular and
easily
available throughout the world. These have become a part of our everyday life. Most of the
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students
from across the globe have access to
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smartphones and
they have been using these electronic devices not
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only
for educational purposes
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but
also
for personal
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uses
.
However
, I believe, the mobile
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phones
should not be
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allowed
in classrooms,
especially
in primary level
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because
it distracts the
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students
and
also
affect the effective interaction.

One of the main reasons for not allowing mobile
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phones
during classes is that, it distracts the students' concentration and creates chaos in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. This causes
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disruption and
they
are found
cheating on
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tests
, taking inappropriate photographs and playing mobile games.
Rather
than paying attention to
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teachers
, they are spending more time on mobile
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phones
.
As a result
, they don’t understand what the topic is about, obtains poor grades in exams.
For instance
, during my final year of undergraduate studies, there was a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
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student
in my batch, who failed in his
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favourite
subject
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because
of mobile chatting during the lecture times.
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So
to
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prevent
distractions caused by mobile
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phones
, these kinds of electronic devices should be
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kept
out of the classroom and
also
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some
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rules
should
be followed
.

Another reason is a disturbance in lecture, discussion between
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teacher
and
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students
. Although they can browse various sites using mobile data or Wi-Fi to
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get
the information discussed in the classroom,
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but
they might miss the main
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important
points and valuable advice, discussed by their
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teacher
.
In addition
, they might waste too much time visiting the non-authentic sites.
For instance
, there are
also
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many
personal blogs and websites where the
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student
cannot
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get
a relevant understanding of the topic.

To sum up, despite having a few pros of using the mobile devices in classrooms, they
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must
not be
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allowed
to
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use
their cell
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phones
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so
that in the future this can
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help
them in achieving better results and build bright career.
Furthermore
, this
also
maintains a better learning and teaching environment for both the
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students
and
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teachers
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is argued that mobile phones and other electronic devices have no place in the classroom. with this view? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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