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Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 3
Deteriorating environmental conditions is one the biggest issues the world is facing today and one of the prime factors contributing to this is the rampant increase in the number of motor vehicles. Certain demographics of the society opine that in order to curb this issue the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles must be increased significantly. I am an advocate for the aforementioned suggestion. To begin with, environmental pollutions and the rate of climate change dramatically rose over the last several decades, this can be directly correlated to the increase in the number of motor vehicles worldwide. It can be acknowledged that in recent years people seldom use public transport to commute from one place to another, rather each family owns more than one private car, owing to the affordability of petrol. Rising the cost of fuels is one of the most efficient ways to tackle this issue. People will be compelled to use public transport like buses and trains, reducing the amount of overall emission of harmful gases into the atmosphere. Furthermore, an inflation in the price of fuels will encourage people to use pollution free means of transport. One such example involves the use of bicycles to travel small distances. In several countries people already started using bicycles to travel from one place to another as it is both cost effective and eco-friendly. In conclusion, motor cars and vehicles are causing a detrimental impact towards the world we live in. It is a moral responsibility of the government to address this matter promptly before the damages become irreversible. In my opinion, a surge in the price of fuels is completely justified to discourage the population against the prevalent use of motor vehicles.
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the biggest issues the world is facing
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today
and one of the prime factors contributing to this is the rampant increase in the number of
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motor
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vehicles
. Certain demographics of the society opine that in order to curb this issue the cost of
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fuel
for cars and other
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vehicles
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must
be increased
significantly
. I am an advocate for the aforementioned suggestion.

To
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begin
with, environmental pollutions and the rate of climate
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change
dramatically
rose over the last several decades, this can be
directly
correlated to the increase in the number of
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motor
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vehicles
worldwide. It can
be acknowledged
that in recent years
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people
seldom
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use
public transport to commute from one place to another,
rather
each family
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owns
more than one private car, owing to the affordability of petrol.

Rising the cost of
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fuels
is one of the most efficient ways to tackle this issue.
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People
will
be compelled
to
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use
public transport like buses and trains, reducing the amount of
overall
emission of harmful gases into the atmosphere.

Furthermore
, an inflation in the price of
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fuels
will encourage
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people
to
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use
pollution free means of transport. One such example involves the
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use
of bicycles to travel
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small
distances. In several countries
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people
already
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started
using bicycles to travel from one place to another as it is both cost effective and eco-friendly.

In conclusion
,
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motor
cars and
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vehicles
are causing a detrimental impact towards the world we
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live
in. It is a moral responsibility of the
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government
to address this matter
promptly
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before
the damages become irreversible. In my opinion, a surge in the price of
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fuels
is completely justified to discourage the population against the prevalent
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use
of
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motor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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