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News plays an important part of most people’s lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead? v.5

News plays an important part of most people’s lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead? v. 5
Nowadays, news has become a significant part of many people’s Lives. By providing updates about the current events happening throughout the globe, news has gained great importance. Although the news media focus more on bad news, owing to high ratings; I believe that equal importance should be given to the good news as well. Since time immemorial, news has always been of great significance to the people. It provides information about the various incidents occurring across the nations and keep individuals updated with the latest knowledge. For example, news provide us the information about the social, the economic and the political issues of the country, and the steps being taken to address them. Moreover, news form the basis of one’s perception that motivates them to work. Thus, to gain insight of the society or the nation we are living in, news plays a crucial role. With the onset of competition between media houses, news dedicated to the bad or horrific aspect of life is telecasted more often. The main reason for this trend is the TRP that determines the popularity of a media channel by counting the eyeballs viewing their programs. Furthermore, humans tend to remember horrific scenes for longer duration than good, pleasing moments, and television channels exploit this nature of persons to earn profit. But at the same time, media channels should also focus on the news about the good events happening around us. For instance, telecasting the work of an NGO aiding the rescue operation of flood survivors motivates individuals to spread the cause and generate donations for the financial assistance. In conclusion, there are so many things, good and bad, happening around us and being aware about these is vital for surviving in the society. However, news should not be biased and all kinds of news should be given equal weight age on media programs.
Nowadays,
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news
has become a significant part of
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people
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. By providing updates about the
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current
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events
happening throughout the globe,
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news
has gained great importance. Although the
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news
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media
focus more on
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bad
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news
, owing to high ratings; I believe that equal importance should be
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given
to the
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good
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news
as well
.

Since time immemorial,
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news
has always been of great significance to the
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people
. It provides information about the various incidents occurring across the nations and
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keep
individuals updated with the latest knowledge.
For example
,
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news
provide us the information about the social, the economic and the political issues of the country, and the steps
being taken
to address them.
Moreover
,
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news
form the basis of one’s perception that motivates them to work.
Thus
, to gain insight of the society or the nation we are living in,
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news
plays a crucial role.

With the onset of competition between
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media
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houses
,
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news
dedicated to the
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bad
or horrific aspect of life is
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telecasted
more
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often
. The main reason for this trend is the TRP that determines the popularity of a
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media
channel by counting the eyeballs viewing their programs.
Furthermore
, humans tend to remember horrific scenes for longer duration than
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good
, pleasing moments, and television channels exploit this nature of persons to earn profit.
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But
at the same time,
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media
channels should
also
focus on the
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news
about the
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good
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events
happening around us.
For instance
, telecasting the work of an NGO aiding the rescue operation of flood survivors motivates individuals to spread the cause and generate donations for the financial assistance.

In conclusion
, there are
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so
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many
things,
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good
and
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bad
, happening around us and being aware about
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these is
vital for surviving in the society.
However
,
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news
should not
be biased
and all kinds of
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news
should be
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given
equal weight age on
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media
programs.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay News plays an important part of most people’s lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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