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Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunize their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunize their children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.9

Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunize their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunize their children? v. 9
Nowadays, with the advent of various types of vaccine, it has become easy to eradicate several dreaded diseases. The most recent issue is whether it should make a law to compulsory immunisation among the children or parent have the right to take decisions about vaccination of their children. I support to former statement and this essay will discuss both view in details. On the one hand, as vaccines have proven beneficial to prevent some disease among the children. Therefore, by the immunisation, many dreaded diseases will be eliminated from the society. Moreover, immunisation is important as both socially and economically. For instance, in early twentieth century, smallpox disease was spread over the children, which leads to some severe problem such as disfigurement and hearing inability. Thus, government aided the program to mandatory immunise against smallpox, which really helpful in eradicating the smallpox from the society. Hence, for maintaining health and disease free society, it is necessary to immunise the kids against some common diseases. On the other hand, it can be possible that, some vaccines cause illness effect among child after vaccination. Therefore, the parent having concerns towards their children's health and sometime they have decided to immunise the child or not. For example, in the initial stage of the polio drop program, some children are complaining against the potential side effects to the body after vaccination. Hence, the guardian should have the right to know about various ill effects of the vaccines. To conclude, by comparing both views, it is necessary to make it compulsory to immunise the children against the various diseases, which is helpful to make society disease free. Although, it is important to aware the parent about illness side effect of some vaccine, but also, sophisticated them with benefits of immunisation of the children to enjoy disease free life.
Nowadays, with the advent of various types of
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vaccine
, it has become easy to eradicate several dreaded
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diseases
. The most recent issue is whether it should
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make
a law to compulsory
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immunisation
among the
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children
or parent have the right to take decisions about vaccination of their
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children
. I support to former statement and this essay will discuss both view in
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details
.

On the one hand, as
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vaccines
have proven beneficial to
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prevent
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some
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disease
among the
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children
.
Therefore
, by the
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immunisation
,
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many
dreaded
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diseases
will
be eliminated
from the
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society
.
Moreover
,
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immunisation
is
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important
as both
socially
and
economically
.
For instance
, in early twentieth century, smallpox
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disease
was spread
over the
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children
, which leads to
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some
severe problem such as disfigurement and hearing inability.
Thus
,
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government
aided the program to mandatory
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immunise
against smallpox, which
really
helpful in eradicating the smallpox from the
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society
.
Hence
, for maintaining health and
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disease
free
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society
, it is necessary to
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immunise
the kids against
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some
common diseases.

On the other hand
, it can be possible that,
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some
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vaccines
cause illness
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effect
among child after vaccination.
Therefore
, the parent having concerns towards their children's health and sometime they have decided to
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immunise
the child or not.
For example
, in the initial stage of the polio drop program,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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children
are complaining against the potential side effects to the body after vaccination.
Hence
, the guardian should have the right to know about various ill effects of the vaccines.

To conclude
, by comparing both views, it is necessary to
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make
it compulsory to
Possible spelling mistake. 'immunise' is British English.
immunise
the
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children
against the various
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diseases
, which is helpful to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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society
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disease
free. Although, it is
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important
to aware the parent about illness side
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effect
of
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some
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vaccine
,
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but
also
, sophisticated them with benefits of
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immunisation
of the
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children
to enjoy
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disease
free life.
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IELTS essay Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunize their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunize their children? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
8
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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