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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through other media platforms. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.5

Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through other media platforms. v. 5
Newspapers have been considered as the most reliable news sources for over a century. The boom of technology that has a dramatically changed some new platforms, so some people can receive information in an easy way. In my opinion, both news sources have their benefits and are necessary for residents’ life. On the one hand, I believe that the press will continue to be an important source of information, even in the Internet age. First, newspaper is the most traditional news media and not everyone wants or can use the Internet instead. For example, older people or people in rural areas may not have the ability or opportunity to access online, while many of us prefer newspapers only even when we have Internet access. Secondly, newspapers can be trusted as a reliable source of news because they employ journalists and professional editors. Finally, many people prefer the experience of holding and reading a piece of paper rather than looking at a computer screen. On the other hand, that attracts people to read news on online sources is their easy access. With the availability of the Internet all over the world, people with handheld devices like mobile phones can access and search for huge amounts of news. In fact, the latest events, such as corona disease, will be updated immediately for people to take common measures. In contrast, with the manufacturing procedures, traditional newspapers may not be able to compete with the Internet in terms of update speed. In conclusion, I disagree with the view that newspapers will continue to be the main source of news, because the Internet will soon be equally important.
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Newspapers
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been considered
as the most reliable
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news
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sources
for over a century. The boom of technology that has a
dramatically
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changed
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some
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new
platforms,
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so
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some
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people
can receive information
Consider replacing "in an easy way" with the adverb for "easy"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an easy way
. In my opinion, both
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news
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sources
have their benefits and are necessary for residents’ life.

On the one hand, I believe that the press will continue to be an
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important
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source
of information, even in the Internet age.
First
,
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newspaper
is the most traditional
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news
media and not everyone wants or can
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use
the Internet
instead
.
For example
, older
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people
or
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people
in rural areas may not have the ability or opportunity to
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access
online, while
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many
of us prefer
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newspapers
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only
even when we have Internet
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access
.
Secondly
,
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newspapers
can
be trusted
as a reliable
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source
of
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news
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because
they employ journalists and professional editors.
Finally
,
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many
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people
prefer the experience of holding and reading a piece of paper
rather
than looking at a computer screen.

On the other hand
, that attracts
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people
to read
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news
on online
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sources
is their easy
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access
. With the availability of the Internet all over the world,
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people
with handheld devices like mobile phones can
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access
and search for huge amounts of
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news
. In fact, the latest
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
, such as corona disease, will
be updated
immediately for
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people
to take common measures.
In contrast
, with the manufacturing procedures, traditional
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newspapers
may not be able to compete with the Internet in terms of update speed.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
conclusion, I disagree with the view that
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newspapers
will continue to be the main
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source
of
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news
,
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because
the Internet will
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soon
be
equally
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important
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through other media platforms. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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