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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.3

Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through other media. v. 3
Migration of skilled people and students to metro cities is drastically increase over a last decade. For some people, it is a concern that may create so many problems. Problems and possible solutions at administration and individual level are discussed in the following paragraph. There are ample problems due to population rising in the cities. Firstly, many people shifting towards to the urban areas which means they are using more public and private transit. It leads to more traffic jam and pollution in the air. Which ultimately disturb the ecological cycle. Secondly, due to population increases, people need space for accommodation. This may compel the government to build infrastructure which affects the economy of the nation. There are some solutions possible at government and individual level, which may tackle this problem in a better way. First of all, government should encourage public to use public transportation by offering some perks and discounts. Secondly, establish the better traffic management system and heavy fines for who break the rules. Thirdly, they should have to provide all basic facilities like healthcare, education, transportation and so on in the rural areas so people can certainly stop moving to the cities. At the individual side, we must have to use public transit facilities and car pooling to reduce traffic on the roads. Moreover, planting more trees to create the balance in the ecosystem. In conclusion, it is true that people are migrating towards the cities for the better quality of life, but the ministry and Individuals together reduce adverse effects on the environment by enforcing rules, increase frequency of public transportation, fulfilling the needs in the rural areas.
Migration of skilled
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people
and students to metro cities is
drastically
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increase
over a last decade.

For
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some
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people
, it is a concern that may create
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so
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many
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problems
.
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Problems
and possible solutions at administration and
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individual
level
are discussed
in the following paragraph.

There are ample
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problems
due to population rising in the cities.
Firstly
,
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many
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people
shifting towards to the urban areas which means they are using more
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public
and private transit. It leads to more traffic jam and pollution in the air.

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Which
ultimately
disturb the ecological cycle.

Secondly
, due to population increases,
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people
need space for accommodation. This may compel the
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government
to build infrastructure which affects the economy of the nation.

There are
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some
solutions possible at
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government
and
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individual
level, which may tackle this
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problem
in a better way.
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First of all
,
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government
should encourage
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public
to
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use
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public
transportation by offering
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some
perks and discounts.
Secondly
, establish the better traffic management system and heavy fines for who break the
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rules
.
Thirdly
, they should
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have to
provide all basic facilities like healthcare, education, transportation and
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so
on in the rural areas
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so
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people
can
certainly
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stop
moving to the cities.

At the
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individual
side, we
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must
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have to
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use
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public
transit facilities and car pooling to
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reduce
traffic on the roads.
Moreover
, planting more trees to create the balance in the ecosystem.

In conclusion
, it is true that
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people
are migrating towards the cities for the better quality of life,
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but
the ministry and
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Individuals
together
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
adverse effects on the environment by enforcing
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rules
, increase frequency of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transportation, fulfilling the needs in the rural areas.
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IELTS essay Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through other media. v. 3

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
273 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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