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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through other media platforms. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.6

Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through other media platforms. v. 6
In the modern technological earth, some people think that media platforms are the best sources for reading news and articles. In the mean time a few others believe that conventional newspapers are the eminent sources, when it comes to news reading. In my opinion, using technological sources is the best way to get to know the information happening around us. Firstly, newspapers cannot cover all the topics that are being held around the world. Moreover, we are nor aware of the current sensations. For instance, when we analyse an average, ordinary newspaper, it only covers the general topics around the globe like Economics, Politics, Health, and Science. Therefore, the availability of different information is limited to an extent. Secondly, the e-sources cover a wide range of subjects all around the world. In addition to that we are notified with the current happenings and situations taking place in different parts of the world. For example, if there is a sudden earthquake or any kind of natural disaster happening around the globe can be seen with evidence through e-sources via modern innovation techniques. Hence, it leads to a faster operation, and mitigates the time requirement for the news to arrive. In conclusion, due to the abundance of various online platforms, people need not to rely only on newspapers anymore. Furthermore, they are not limited upon the contents, and also it eliminates the inconvenience caused while carrying newspapers where ever they go. Lastly, it doesn't depend upon the circumstances and conditions for operation.
In the modern technological earth,
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some
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people
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think
that media platforms are the best sources for reading news and articles. In the
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mean time
a few others believe that conventional
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newspapers
are the eminent sources, when it
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comes
to news reading.
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In
my opinion, using technological sources is the best way to
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get
to know the information happening
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around
us.

Firstly
,
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newspapers
cannot cover all the topics that are
being held
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around
the world.
Moreover
, we are nor aware of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
sensations.
For instance
, when we
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analyse
an average, ordinary
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newspaper
, it
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only
covers the general topics
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around
the globe like Economics, Politics, Health, and Science.
Therefore
, the availability of
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different
information
is limited
to an extent.

Secondly
, the e-sources cover a wide range of subjects all
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around
the world.
In addition
to that we
are notified
with the
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current
happenings and situations taking place in
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different
parts of the world.
For example
, if there is a sudden earthquake or any kind of natural disaster happening
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around
the globe can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
with evidence through e-sources via modern innovation techniques.
Hence
, it leads to a faster operation, and mitigates the time requirement for the news to arrive.

In conclusion
, due to the abundance of various online platforms,
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people
need not
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to rely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
on
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newspapers
anymore.
Furthermore
, they are not limited upon the contents, and
also
it eliminates the inconvenience caused while carrying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
where ever they go.
Lastly
, it doesn't depend upon the circumstances and conditions for operation.
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IELTS essay Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through other media platforms. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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