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Some people think that newspapers are the best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that the Internet is a better source. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that newspapers are the best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that the Internet is a better source. v. 1
Nowadays, it is necessary for younger to evaluate the differentiate between right to wrong acts. Some people believe that punishing is the appropriate step to educate the child's moral supports. However, I disagree with the above statement. Although, there is a range of disciplinary actions that parents, and teachers should adopt with children moral values. On the one hand, punishment might create a negative influence on children physical and psychological behaviour. In a growing age, adolescent are being excited for learning each and every activity occurred in their surrounding by parents or society. Therefore, due to the physical violence, they become criminals or mentally retarded, which eventually produced detrimental effect of environment. For instance, physical punishment is no longer seen in modern nations, but still many cases of victimized are present in developing countries and still goes on. On the other hand, parents or teachers should adopt various disciplinary actions for behaving children moral values. For example, parents should refrain from them by inhibiting to go playground for one to two days, awarding a chocolate or gift for their good behaviour. Whereas, for teachers, they should involve themselves in standing positions or written a hundred lines paragraph that he or she will not do this act again. Moreover, individual, should perform loving and caring ideal, exemplary action to their offspring. This also leads to better results for their future. After hashing out the issues it can be concluded that punishment is necessary to teach children morality but not be physical or psychological. However, individuals must constructive ideas to track them in the right path.
Nowadays, it is necessary for younger to evaluate
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the differentiate
between right to
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wrong
acts.
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Some
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people
believe that punishing is the appropriate step to educate the child's moral supports.
However
, I disagree with the above statement. Although, there is a range of disciplinary actions that
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parents
, and teachers should adopt with
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children
moral values.

On the one hand, punishment might create a
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negative
influence on
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children
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
and psychological
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behaviour
. In a growing age, adolescent are
being excited
for learning each and every activity occurred in their surrounding by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
or society.
Therefore
, due to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
violence, they become criminals or
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mentally retarded
, which
eventually
produced detrimental effect of environment.
For instance
,
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physical
punishment is no longer
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seen
in modern nations,
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but
still
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many
cases of victimized are present in
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developing countries
and
still
goes on.

On the other hand
,
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parents
or teachers should adopt various disciplinary actions for behaving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
moral values.
For example
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
should refrain from them by inhibiting to go playground for one to two days, awarding a chocolate or gift for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
. Whereas, for teachers, they should involve themselves in standing positions or written a hundred lines paragraph that he or she will not do this act again.
Moreover
, individual, should perform loving and caring ideal, exemplary action to their offspring. This
also
leads to better results for their future.

After hashing out the issues it can
be concluded
that punishment is necessary to teach
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
morality
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
or psychological.
However
, individuals
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must constructive
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ideas
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
them in the right path.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that newspapers are the best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that the Internet is a better source. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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