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Some people think that newspapers are the best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that the Internet is a better source. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people think that newspapers are the best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that the Internet is a better source. v. 2
In the modern world, there is a wide range of resources, and citizens have the opportunity to use whatever resources they want. While some people prefer the old methods of reviewing news, some of them are keen to utilize new technologies to read the news. Personally, I believe that online reading is suitable for many people because of its convenience and availability. On the one hand, the Internet can be useful for those who want to speed up the reading process. These kings of people are willing to get the news from various resources, and it is essential for them to take all online magazine articles into consideration. Unfortunately, many conservative methods of delivering information cannot provide exact materials. Moreover, it is true that advanced technologies are approachable. For example, people can use personal computers, smart phones and laptops to get the necessary dates. On the other hand, previous methods may be useful in restoring materials. In this case, individuals are able to find any info from the old resources. Furthermore, another advantage of newspapers and magazines is general availability. For example, many elderly people cannot use the new technologies to read. In this regard, they can replace them with textbooks and printed materials. In conclusion, although many people are reckoned to choose internet to be aware about the recent changes in society, newspapers and magazines are extremely useful for elderly people. However, In my opinion, innovative new technologies will change the conservative methods, leading to the development in this field.
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use
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some
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people
prefer the
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old
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methods
of reviewing
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news
,
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some
of them are keen to utilize
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new
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technologies
to read the
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news
.
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, I believe that online reading is suitable for
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many
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people
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because
of its convenience and availability.

On the one hand, the Internet can be useful for those who want to
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speed up
the reading process. These kings of
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people
are willing to
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get
the
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news
from various resources, and it is essential for them to take all online magazine articles into consideration. Unfortunately,
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many
conservative
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methods
of delivering information cannot provide exact materials.
Moreover
, it is true that advanced
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technologies
are approachable.
For example
,
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people
can
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use
personal computers, smart phones and laptops to
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get
the necessary dates.

On the other hand
, previous
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methods
may be useful in restoring materials.
In this case
, individuals are able to find any info from the
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old
resources.
Furthermore
, another advantage of newspapers and magazines is general availability.
For example
,
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many
elderly
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people
cannot
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use
the
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new
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technologies
to read. In this regard, they can replace them with textbooks and printed materials.

In conclusion
, although
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many
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people
are reckoned
to choose internet to be aware about the recent
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changes
in society, newspapers and magazines are
extremely
useful for elderly
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people
.
However
, In my opinion, innovative
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new
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technologies
will
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change
the conservative
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methods
, leading to the development in this field.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Some people think that newspapers are the best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that the Internet is a better source. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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