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Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.5

Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. v. 5
It is thought by some individuals that newly constructed buildings ought to follow the same pattern as the old ones in the countryside, others are of the opinion that people should be given independence to build their houses whichever way they please. Although building new houses as the old ones would create uniformity, I believe variety of different structures are better. A large number of people believe that the construction of modern buildings should be the same as the old ones in the backwoods because it makes it uniform. In other words, the houses would have the same structure and it would add to the beauty of the environment. Take for instance, Estates that are built in Lekki, Lagos State, Nigeria. They are constructed in a similar pattern and it makes the environment beautiful. Therefore, apartments should be built with the same style. I do not agree with this view because you might get lost if you are not familiar with the layout of the place. Arguing differently are those who believe that individuals ought to be given freedom to construct their houses as they deem fit. I agree with this set of people because it creates variety, which is the spice of life. For example, In my growing up days, I was opportune to live in different apartments in the University of Lagos compound- as my Father was a lecturer - and I loved it because the houses I lived in was always different from the previous one. So allowing individuals the independence to erect their own style houses in the local areas brings about diversity in structures. In conclusion, despite people’s varying opinions, I consider the uniqueness of building to ones specification more beneficial than the uniformity of them.
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buildings
ought to follow the same pattern as the
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ones
in the countryside, others are of the opinion that
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people
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independence to build their
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houses
whichever way they
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. Although
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building
new
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houses
as the
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old
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ones
would create uniformity, I believe variety of
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different
structures are better.

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people
believe that the construction of modern
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buildings
should be the same as the
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old
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ones
in the backwoods
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because
it
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makes
it uniform.
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, the
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houses
would have the same structure and it would
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add
to the beauty of the environment. Take
for instance
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are built
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Lekki
, Lagos State, Nigeria. They
are constructed
in a similar pattern and it
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makes
the environment
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beautiful
.
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be built
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agree
with this view
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because
you might
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get
lost if you are not familiar with the layout of the place.

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differently
are those who believe that individuals ought to be
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given
freedom to construct their
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houses
as they deem fit. I
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agree
with this set of
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people
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because
it creates variety, which is the spice of life.
For example
, In my growing up days, I was opportune to
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live
in
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different
apartments in the University of Lagos compound- as my Father was a lecturer
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and I
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loved
it
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because
the
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houses
I
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lived
in was always
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different
from the previous one.
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So
allowing individuals the independence to erect their
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own
style
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houses
in the local areas brings about diversity in structures.

In conclusion
, despite
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people’s
varying opinions, I consider the uniqueness of
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building
to
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ones
specification more beneficial than the uniformity of them.
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IELTS essay Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of the old houses in the local areas, while others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own styles. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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