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Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in group while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in group while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. v. 1
Finding the best method in academic life is a great topic, which is attracted by the attention of students. More and more people begin to realize that students will gain more beneficial when studying in groups, while there is numerous debate that pupil should be encouraged in the study alone. From my point of view, I strongly believe that someone study in groups can bring more effective than study alone, because of the following reasons above. When students take a step into their major, they have to face various problems related to the quantity of knowledge. To keep abreast with these learning programs, students have to work intensively as well as trying to improve their knowledge. Sometimes, their efforts not only do not bring high efficiency but also pressure in the process of their study. As a result, studying in groups is considered the best learning method. Firstly, studying in groups, where all members can give their questions that they do not understand or share their opinion about a problem through professions seminars. For instance, in Japan’s education system, students are usually encouraged to work together to save their researching time as well as improving studying effectively without getting work-overload. Secondly, members will present their ideas after researching, so these activities also improve sort skills as debating and problem- solving ability, which helps students are more confident in life. Finally, many students may derive energy from being around other people and look forward to learning and discussing the material with classmates. This would create inspiration and a positive attitude towards learning, as well as encourage the pursuit of further education. In the other hand, others believe that study alone hold crucial roles with students due to they can proactively give their ideas and have responsibility for their results. However, studying alone can existing problems like uncontrol risk in each stage of the studying process, do not have a comparison. So, they can easily make mistakes about errors in sequences. To sum up, while there are some students who may choose to study alone because they can independently control their study and have no unnecessary distractions from others, it seems to me that group study is more worthwhile regarding comprehensive understanding and learning motivation.
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students
. More and more
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people
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begin
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students
will gain more beneficial when
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studying
in
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groups
, while there is numerous debate that pupil should
be encouraged
in the
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study
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alone
. From my point of view, I
strongly
believe that someone
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study
in
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groups
can bring more effective than
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study
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alone
,
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of the following reasons above.

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students
take a step into their major, they
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have to
face various
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problems
related to the quantity of knowledge. To
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keep
abreast with these
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learning
programs,
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students
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have to
work
intensively
as well
as trying to
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improve
their knowledge.
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, their efforts not
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only
do not bring high efficiency
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but
also
pressure in the process of their
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study
.
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,
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studying
in
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groups
is considered
the best
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learning
method.
Firstly
,
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studying
in
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groups
, where all members can give their questions that they do not understand or share their opinion about a
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problem
through professions seminars.
For instance
, in Japan’s education system,
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students
are
usually
encouraged to work together to save their researching time
as well
as improving
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studying
effectively
without getting work-overload.
Secondly
, members will present their
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ideas
after researching,
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so
these activities
also
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improve
sort
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skills
as debating and
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problem-
solving ability, which
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helps
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students
are more confident in life.
Finally
,
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many
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students
may derive energy from being around
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other
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people
and look forward to
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learning
and discussing the material with classmates. This would create inspiration and a
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positive
attitude towards
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learning
,
as well
as encourage the pursuit of
further
education.

In the
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other
hand, others believe that
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study
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alone
hold crucial roles with
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students
due to they can
proactively
give their
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ideas
and have responsibility for their results.
However
,
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studying
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alone
can existing
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problems
like
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in each stage of the
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studying
process, do not have a comparison.
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, they can
easily
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make
mistakes about errors in sequences.

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students
who may choose to
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alone
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because
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independently
control their
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study
and have no unnecessary distractions from others, it seems to me that
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group
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study
is more worthwhile regarding comprehensive understanding and
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learning
motivation.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in group while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
373 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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