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Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climates. Discuss both views and explain which climate you prefer. v.1

Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climates. v. 1
Different seasons bring different experiences and one such experience is change in climate. For centuries people have been debating on which climate is better to live in, hot or cold? While a section of society prefers hot, there are many others who adore the cold weather. This essay will discuss why it living in cold conditions is much more fun when compared to living in hot climate. Just like other preferences, people have their say when it comes to weather. People who like to live in countries with hot climate argue that it is the best kind of climate. Especially, because they have year round access to swimming pools and water sports. Moreover, they can indulge in outdoor activities as days are longer. For instance, the population of Dallas more sun time when compared to people living in Boston thus enabling them to be outdoors for much longer. For these reasons, many support the notion that lifestyle of hot places and countries. Conversely, many people like living in the cold climate. People living in cold weather places love the fact that they do not have to deal with sweat all the time even while performing mundane tasks. Also, it is easier to keep food items fresh for long in colder weather. Various studies from Harvard University have proved that food items and produce does stay fresh longer and requires less refrigeration. Overall, cold climate nations have a definite advantage when it comes to preserving food. To conclude, weather is a very subject topic. This essay discussed why despite having more sun time, colder nations are much more fun as they allow people to be free from sweat. Personally, I prefer living in cold weather much more because one can easily play outdoors without having to worry about dehydration and replenishing the fluids.
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change
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. For centuries
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have been debating on which
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is better to
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live
in, hot or
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? While a section of society prefers hot, there are
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cold
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weather
. This essay will discuss why it
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living
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conditions is
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much
more fun when compared to
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living
in hot climate.

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weather
.
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in countries with hot
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argue that it is the best kind of
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, they can indulge in outdoor activities as days are longer.
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, the population of Dallas more sun time when compared to
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people
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living
in Boston
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the notion that lifestyle of hot places and countries.

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,
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.
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places
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food items fresh for long in colder
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weather
. Various studies from Harvard University have proved that food items and produce does stay fresh longer and requires less refrigeration.
Overall
,
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cold
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nations have a
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advantage when it
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to preserving food.

To conclude
,
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is a
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very
subject topic. This essay discussed why despite having more sun time, colder nations are
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much
more fun as they
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allow
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people
to be free from sweat.
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cold
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much
more
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because
one can
easily
play outdoors without having to worry about dehydration and replenishing the fluids.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climates. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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