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Some people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries, shop and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.6

Some people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries, shop and on public transport. with this statement? v. 6
he mobile phone has become the most popular gadget in today’s world. some people argue that usage of cell phones should be prohibited in the public places. Personally, I completely agree with this idea due to many reasons. In my opinion, there are many health and social problems that can occur as a result of using mobile phones in public places. socially, a mobile phone can be described as an intrusive tool. it can disturb others while they are concentrating and reading in some places like libraries. mobile phone etiquette is an important issue when mobile ringing at movies or in the libraries. Users often speak with loud volume and annoy the others people nearby. it has become common practice for places like bookshops and libraries to post a sign prohibiting the usage of mobile phone. Also, many public trains offer a ' quiet zones ' where phone use is banned. Another lethal concern is the health problems that can be caused by using cell phones in the public places. Firstly, I believe that there is a strong correlation between the usage of the mobile phone in the public places, like public transportation and increased numbers of traffic accidents. mobile have been a major distraction on the road even when using ' hands- free' system (talking without the involvement of the hands). some studies have shown that talking on a phone while driving is equally impairing as drinking and driving. Secondly, there are possible radiation impacts on the brain from the mobile phones, with increased possibility of certain types of tumours in long - time, to persistent heavy users. Finally, the signal of mobile phones can cause serious problems in some public places like hospital and public transport by interfering with the signal of medical and communication devices. even in the public transport if any patient wears implanted heart device, the mobile phone can interfere with it and it could be stopped completely. So mobile phone can have fatal consequences for patients in the hospital and other public places. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that the use of cell phones in the public places should be prohibited completely.
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mobile
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phone
has become the most popular gadget in
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today
’s world.
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some
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people
argue that usage of cell
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phones
should
be prohibited
in the
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public
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places
.
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, I completely
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agree
with this
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idea
due to
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many
reasons.

In my opinion, there are
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many
health and social problems that can occur
as a result
of using mobile
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phones
in
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public
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places
.
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socially
, a mobile
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phone
can be
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described
as an intrusive tool.
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it
can disturb others while they are concentrating and reading in
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some
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places
like libraries.
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mobile
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phone
etiquette is an
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important
issue when mobile ringing at movies or in the libraries. Users
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often
speak with loud volume and annoy the others
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people
nearby.
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it
has become common practice for
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places
like bookshops and libraries to post a
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sign
prohibiting the usage of mobile
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phone
.
Also
,
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many
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public
trains offer a ' quiet zones ' where
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phone
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use
is banned
.

Another lethal concern is the health problems that can
be caused
by using cell
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phones
in the
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public
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places
.
Firstly
, I believe that there is a strong correlation between the usage of the mobile
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phone
in the
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public
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places
, like
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public
transportation and increased numbers of traffic accidents.
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mobile
have been a major distraction on the road even when using ' hands-
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free&
#039; system (talking without the involvement of the hands).
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some
studies have shown that talking on a
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phone
while driving is
equally
impairing as drinking and driving.
Secondly
, there are possible radiation impacts on the brain from the mobile
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phones
, with increased possibility of certain types of
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time, to persistent heavy users.

Finally
, the signal of mobile
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phones
can cause serious problems in
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some
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public
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places
like hospital and
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public
transport by interfering with the signal of medical and communication devices.
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even
in the
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public
transport if any patient wears implanted heart device, the mobile
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phone
can interfere with it and it could be
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stopped
completely.
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So
mobile
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phone
can have fatal consequences for patients in the hospital and other
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public
places.

In conclusion
, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that the
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use
of cell
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phones
in the
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public
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places
should
be prohibited
completely.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries, shop and on public transport. with this statement? v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
362 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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