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Some people think that mental strength is more important for success in sport. Some people believe that physical health is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that mental strength is more important for success in sport. Some people believe that physical health is more important. v. 1
It is often believed that physical health is more important than mental strength for success in sport. There are many people with the opposite opinion, though. In my view, mental power is more important than physical health and here I will try to explain why do I think so. To begin with there are many professional sportsmen who started their careers behind other competitors in terms of pure strength, endurance or agility. However, those who had enough persistence and will get better results in the end. For instant, Muggsy Bogues a professional basketball player whose height was short compared to other players. In the end, Muggsy formed his aggressive game style based on his short height and agility thanks to that got his nickname. Another thing is it is not as easy to train own mental power. Although the same statement can be applied to physique as well when it comes to mental condition improvement, it requires not only discipline, efforts and a strong will but certain situations. Mental power is trained in stressful situations when a person needs to make a difficult choice or protect his rights or honour. What is more challenging than pushups or training with weights. Doubtless, physical strength is a crucial quality for the sportsman as it widens his opportunity. And here we meet other problems. Of course, in long terms physically strong person will outclass the weak one as his limits comparatively higher. But we should take into account the fact that people often give up a half due to the lack of motivation or any other reasons. Another problem is stress. It is undeniable that any competitive sport is also stressful. Often mentally weak people just can't handle the stress what causes bad performance. To conclude, it is up to everybody to decide what is more important mental strength or physical health. Humans are rather balanced creatures and it is a rare case when one quality strongly surpasses another. The same idea is here. Nonetheless, when we talk about the exact proportions I still think that mental power is a crucial quality not only in sports but in life.
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believed that
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health is more
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mental
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for success in sport. There are
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with the opposite opinion, though. In my view,
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mental
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is more
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health and here I will try to
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with there are
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professional sportsmen who
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started
their careers behind
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other
competitors in terms of pure
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strength
, endurance or agility.
However
, those who had
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enough
persistence and will
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get
better results in the
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end
. For instant,
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Muggsy
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Bogues
a professional basketball player whose height was short compared to
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other
players. In the
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end
,
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Muggsy
formed his aggressive game style based on his short height and agility thanks to that
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got
his nickname.

Another thing is it is not as easy to train
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own
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mental
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power
. Although the same statement can
be applied
to physique
as well
when it
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to
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condition improvement, it requires not
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discipline, efforts and a strong will
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certain situations.
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Mental
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power
is trained
in stressful situations when a person needs to
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make
a difficult choice or protect his rights or
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honour
.
What is more
challenging than
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pushups
or training with weights.

Doubtless,
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physical
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strength
is a crucial quality for the sportsman as it widens his opportunity. And here we
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meet
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other
problems.
Of course
, in long terms
physically
strong person will outclass the weak one as his limits
comparatively
higher.
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we should take into account the fact that
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people
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give up a half due to the lack of motivation or any
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other
reasons. Another problem is
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stress
. It is undeniable that any competitive sport is
also
stressful.
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mentally weak
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people
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just
can't handle the
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what causes
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bad
performance.

To conclude
, it is up to everybody to decide
what is more
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important
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mental
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strength
or
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physical
health. Humans are
rather
balanced creatures and it is a rare case when one quality
strongly
surpasses another. The same
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idea
is here. Nonetheless, when we talk about the exact proportions I
still
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think
that
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mental
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power
is a crucial quality not
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only
in sports
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in life.
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IELTS essay Some people think that mental strength is more important for success in sport. Some people believe that physical health is more important. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
356 words
6.5
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