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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. v. 3
There are drastic changes that have been noticed in the environment over the years and one of them is a continual diminishing of fossil fuels, hence, if we ban cars that burn non renewable energy, then it would be a great step towards preserving the same. So, I completely in agreement with the idea that all such cars should be replaced with electric cars as it would preserve fossil fuels and save our climate from hazardous gases. As we know that with time, we are running out of fossil fuels and it is very much possible that in the future we would not see it. Preserving fuels by adopting alternate methods like using electric cars would be a great help. It will put a brake on the continuous depletion of fuels. Dubai is one such example, who has already adopted the concept of electric cars and effected a tremendous drop in the usage of fossil fuel for transportation. The use of electric cars over cars that uses fossil fuel, not only preserves fuel, but saves our environment from dangerous gases. As we know that with the multiplication of automobiles, the air quality index is also diminishing at a similar rate and becoming poisonous day by day. The use of electric cars will be a commending step to control atmospheric pollution. In Delhi, last year’s AQI observed to be very poor, hence the Delhi government has introduced electric cars in the city to control the air pollution of the capital. Although, it is still in a very premature stage, but would be taking over completely in the next five years. I would be concluding this essay with this statement that the use of electric cars is the need of the hour to preserve fossil fuels and save our environment from air pollution.
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that have
been noticed
in the environment over the years and one of them is a continual diminishing of
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fossil
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fuels
,
hence
, if we ban
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cars
that burn
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non renewable
energy, then it would be a great step towards preserving the same.

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, I completely in agreement with the
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idea
that all such
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cars
should
be replaced
with
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electric
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cars
as it would preserve
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fossil
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fuels
and save our climate from hazardous gases.

As we know that with time, we are running out of
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fossil
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fuels
and it is
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very
much possible that in the future we would not
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see
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Preserving
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fuels
by adopting alternate methods like using
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electric
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cars
would be a great
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help
. It will put a brake on the continuous depletion of fuels.

Dubai is one such example, who has already adopted the concept of
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electric
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cars
and effected a tremendous drop in the usage of
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fossil
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fuel
for transportation.

The
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of
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over
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that
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fossil
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, not
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preserves
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fuel
,
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but
saves our environment from
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dangerous
gases. As we know that with the multiplication of automobiles, the air quality index is
also
diminishing at a similar rate and becoming poisonous day by day.

The
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use
of
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will be a commending step to control atmospheric pollution.

In Delhi, last year’s AQI observed to be
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very
poor,
hence
the Delhi
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government
has introduced
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electric
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cars
in the city to control the air pollution of the capital.

Although, it is
still
in a
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very
premature stage,
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but
would be taking over completely in the
next
five years.

I would be concluding this essay with this statement that the
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use
of
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electric
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cars
is the need of the hour to preserve
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fossil
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fuels
and save our environment from air pollution.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. v. 3

Essay
  American English
10 paragraphs
301 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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