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Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. v.8

Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. v. 8
Nature has blessed both men and women with individual characters, which set them apart. All these different characteristics enable them to do different tasks according to their affinities. Due to this, some people opine that it would be best for both sexes to involve themselves in those tasks which suit their personality and skill sets. Others, however, think that both are equal and can do each other’s job as efficiently as they can do their own. Therefore, let us analyse the task from both perspectives in order to reach to a relevant conclusion. To begin with, it can be said that both males and females have an individual set of characteristics, which enables them to perform well in certain tasks. For example, women are considered exceptionally good at taking care of the household activities and bringing up the children. As most of the women are kind, loving and caring by nature, they are best suited for this job. What is more, they are also seen as worthy of the job of taking care of household activities due to their creativity and organisational skills. Similarly, men also have some special traits attached with their personality. For instance, men are deemed to be strong, confident and decisive. These qualities make it possible for them to give excellent performance in areas such as earning bread and butter for the home and making decisions for the family. Apart from that, they can also support their families in emotional as well as security matters. However, even though both genders are best suited for the jobs mentioned above, we cannot ignore the changing trends, which are taking place in modern world. Nowadays, with the spread of education and equal rights, more and more women are breaking the barriers of their home in order to work outside. They can be seen placed at several important positions, from doctors to politicians and they are also performing better than the expectations of most of the people. In the same way, men are also indulging themselves in household tasks by looking after their children and doing household chores. Therefore, it cannot be said that both of the genders are best suitable to do only one type of work. Women are performing well in professions like teaching, nursing, marketing and those kinds of jobs suits their natural talents and skills. On the other hand, men can work in a crowd and in places where physical labour is required. In the ultimate analysis, it can be said that both men and women have been separated with individual qualities facilitating them with abilities to do several tasks. But, by looking at the current norms, it will be wrong to think that they cannot do each other’s job.
Nature has blessed both
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men
and
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women
with individual characters, which set them apart. All these
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different
characteristics enable them to do
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different
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tasks
according to their affinities. Due to this,
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some
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people
opine that it would be
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best
for both sexes to involve themselves in those
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tasks
which suit their personality and
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skill
sets. Others,
however
,
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think
that both are equal and can do each
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other’s
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job
as
efficiently
as they can do their
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own
.
Therefore
,
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let
us
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analyse
the
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task
from both perspectives in order to reach to a relevant conclusion.

To
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begin
with, it can
be said
that both males and females have an individual set of characteristics, which enables them to perform well in certain
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tasks
.
For example
,
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women
are considered
exceptionally
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good
at taking care of the
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household
activities and bringing up the children. As most of the
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women
are kind, loving and caring by nature, they are
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best
suited for this
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job
.
What is more
, they are
also
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seen
as worthy of the
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job
of taking care of
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household
activities due to their creativity and
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organisational
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skills
.
Similarly
,
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men
also
have
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some
special traits attached with their personality.
For instance
,
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men
are deemed
to be strong, confident and decisive. These qualities
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make
it possible for them to give excellent performance in areas such as earning bread and butter for the home and making decisions for the family. Apart from that, they can
also
support their families in emotional
as well
as security matters.

However
,
even though
both genders are
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best
suited for the
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jobs
mentioned above, we cannot
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ignore
the changing trends, which are taking place in modern world. Nowadays, with the spread of education and equal rights, more and more
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women
are breaking the barriers of their home in order to work outside. They can be
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seen
placed at several
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important
positions, from doctors to
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politicians and
they are
also
performing better than the expectations of most of the
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people
.
In the same way
,
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men
are
also
indulging themselves in
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household
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tasks
by looking after their children and doing
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household
chores.
Therefore
, it cannot
be said
that both of the genders are
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best
suitable to do
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only
one type of work.

Women are performing well in professions like teaching, nursing, marketing and those kinds of
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jobs
suits their natural talents and
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skills
. On the
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other
hand,
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men
can work in a crowd and in places where physical
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labour
is required
.

In the ultimate analysis, it can
be said
that both
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men
and
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women
have
been separated
with individual qualities facilitating them with abilities to do several
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tasks
.
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But
, by looking at the
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current
norms, it will be
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wrong
to
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think
that they cannot do each
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other’s
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job
.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. v. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
454 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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