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Some people think that media should not report detail of crimes to the public. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that media should not report detail of crimes to the public. v. 1
One of the most controversial issues today relates to many people see that many shows and different program’s impact us by wrongly side, but some of them believe that this issue has two sides of the audience. In this essay, I am going to examine this question from both points of view. On one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits of watching different types of programs will transfer many cultures between community members. Like, when we follow the Chinese series, this will develop our self and will support us by new data. Considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is that following several society programs affect on our children because maybe they are learning new language. Such as my children follow the American channel, now they can make English as a second language. It is also possible to say that when somebody travel to another country which has not some habits, this will be an important factor to adapt in. For example, when my friend came from Canada, she has not difficult when she wants to register in our school. One good illustration of this is someday I had been watching a documentary movie about ordinary dealing with polar bears, after that I can deal with this special animal safety procedures. On the other hand, it is also possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact, watching programs, television can make any person losing more opportunities to develop their self. As an example of, the children are registered in The voice, many of them cannot complete their study in showing time. People often have this opinion because they are suffering with their friends or their children. Such as brother’s friends are spending enormous time with Television. A second point of believing this is spending much free time in front of television, will effect on our health specifically visual force. As an example, my daughter cannot see clearly without medical glasses. A particularly good example here is one of the important examples of negatively affection is the establishment of several kinds of television screens and the price of it become dramatically expensive. To sum up, as we have seen, there are no easy answers to this question. On balance, however, I tend to believe that social media has many factors which you consider may be in the pros or cons as you want.
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impact us by
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of them believe that this issue has two sides of the audience. In this essay, I am going to examine this question from both points of view.

On one side of the argument there are
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people
who argue that the benefits of watching
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different
types of
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programs
will transfer
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many
cultures between community members. Like, when we follow the Chinese series, this will develop our self and will support us by new data.
Considerably
outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is that following several society
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programs
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affect
on our
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children
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because
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children
follow the American channel,
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now
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English as a second language. It is
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habits, this will be an
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important
factor to adapt in. For
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example
, when my friend came from Canada, she has not difficult when she wants to register in our school. One
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good
illustration of this is someday I had been watching a documentary movie about ordinary dealing with polar bears, after that I can deal with this special animal safety procedures.

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the opposing case. It is
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often
argued that in fact, watching
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programs
,
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television
can
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make
any person losing more opportunities to develop their self. As an
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example
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children
are registered
in The voice,
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many
of them cannot complete their study in showing time.
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People
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have this opinion
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children
. Such as brother’s friends are spending enormous time with
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Television
. A second point of believing this is spending much free time in front of
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television
, will
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effect
on our health
specifically
visual force. As an
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example
, my daughter cannot
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see
clearly
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television
screens and the price of it become
dramatically
expensive.

To sum up, as we have
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, there are no easy answers to this question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that social media has
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factors which you consider may be in the pros or cons as you want.
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IELTS essay Some people think that media should not report detail of crimes to the public. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
406 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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