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Some people think that the media have to right to publish detail of people’s view, while other thinks it should be controlled. Discuss both views. v.1

Some people think that the media have to right to publish detail of people’s view, while other thinks it should be controlled. v. 1
There is a conflicting opinion about publication rights in the media industry. While some believe that they are entitled to publicise the people's viewpoint, others think that there should be restrictions on the level of what they can make known to the public. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument. To begin with, it is often considered by some people that the media have a right to broadcast people's opinion because they have access to question people during or after an incident. This simply means that the populace are updated on the thoughts of the populace on matters arising in the society, by relying on what they read either on newspaper, news or social media. Consequently, it would help broaden people's knowledge on issues as well as how to tackle it. To illustrate, in the recent salary negotiation between Nigeria Labour Congress and the government, civil servants aired their views during an interview with Channels representative and they were publicized. Contrary to this, some people think that a limit should be made on what they make known to the populace. The reason is that it would prevent creating a negative impression about the country since some opinions might be biased. In other words, if it is a partial statement made due to political interest, then it would help to avoid instilling wrong impression in the person's mind or even scaring foreign investors. In Nigeria, for instance, during the Boko Haram insurgence, the media created did not create an impression that the whole country was unsafe especially the Northern part of the country. As a result of this, so many multinational companies located in that part of the country did not close down. Therefore, a limit to what should be publicized should be made. In conclusion, although some people feel the media should broadcast people's view, there are people who think that this information should be censored. Despite the fact that people could widen their knowledge through it, it could also affect the economic level of the country when it results to unemployed citizens.
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industry. While
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some
believe that they
are entitled
to
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publicise
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people's
viewpoint, others
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think
that there should be restrictions on the level of what they can
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make
known to the public. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument.

To
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begin
with, it is
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often
considered by
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some
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people
that the
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media
have a right to broadcast
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people's
opinion
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because
they have access to question
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people
during or after an incident. This
simply
means that the populace
are updated
on the thoughts of the populace on matters arising in the society, by relying on what they read either on newspaper, news or social
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media
.
Consequently
, it would
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help
broaden
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people's
knowledge on issues
as well
as how to tackle it. To illustrate, in the recent salary negotiation between Nigeria
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Labour
Congress and the
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government
, civil servants aired their views during an interview with Channels
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representative and
they were
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publicized
.

Contrary to this,
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some
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people
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think
that a limit should
be made
on what they
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make
known to the populace. The reason is that it would
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prevent
creating a
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negative
impression about the
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country
since
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some
opinions might
be biased
.
In other words
, if it is a partial statement made due to political interest, then it would
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help
to avoid instilling
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wrong
impression in the person's mind or even scaring foreign investors. In Nigeria,
for instance
, during the
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Boko
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Haram
insurgence, the
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media
created did not create an impression that the whole
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country
was unsafe
especially
the Northern part of the
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country
.
As a result
of this,
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so
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many
multinational
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companies
located in that part of the
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country
did not close down.
Therefore
, a limit to what should be
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publicized
should
be made
.

In conclusion
, although
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some
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people
feel the
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should broadcast
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people's
view, there are
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people
who
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think
that this information should
be censored
. Despite the fact that
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people
could widen their knowledge through it, it could
also
affect the economic level of the
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country
when it results to unemployed citizens.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that the media have to right to publish detail of people’s view, while other thinks it should be controlled. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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