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Some people think that living in a country for a period of time is needed to learn the language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that living in a country for a period of time is needed to learn the language and culture. v. 2
It is believed by some that it is necessary to reside in a nation for a length of time to master their language and culture. Although, I share similar view, however, it is also possible to become acquainted with a foreign language and culture without necessarily living in the country. Firstly, learning a second language is often a difficult and complex task for everyone, especially adults. Language acquisition involves mastering how they are spoken and writing to convey the right meaning. In other words, it requires one to become familiar with the word-formation, word order and syntax which is not always easy to learn on ones own, but with constant interaction with native speakers it makes it faster for people to learn in a specified time frame. For instance, when I relocated to Germany, speaking as well as writing German was difficult at first, but with continuous communication with the nationals, I was perfect in it in 2 years time. Presently, I can communicate with German, also participate in their tradition. However, a foreign language and custom can also be learnt without living in the country. There are a number of language schools with professional tutors where people have successfully learnt a second language. These schools are in almost every country which enables anyone seeking to learn another language of choice to enroll and learn as opposed to living with the nationals. To give a clear example, my wife was able to learn French language and culture in Nigeria within eighteen months by successfully completing a French language course, now it is almost impossible to distinguish her from French nationals. Furthermore, internet has also made it easy for people to learn culture of a certain nation by surfing through websites such as Google and Wikipedia. To conclude, due to complexity of any language and its culture, it is always easy to learn one by residing with the native speakers in their country, but people can also be taught through language schools and internet anywhere in the world.
It
is believed
by
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some
that it is necessary to reside in a nation for a length of time to master their
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language
and
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culture
. Although, I share similar view,
however
, it is
also
possible to become acquainted with a foreign
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language
and
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culture
without
necessarily
living in the country.

Firstly
, learning a second
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language
is
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often
a difficult and complex task for everyone,
especially
adults.
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Language
acquisition involves mastering how they
are spoken
and writing to convey the right meaning.
In other words
, it requires one to become familiar with the word-formation, word order and syntax which is not always easy to
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learn
on ones
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own
,
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but
with constant interaction with native speakers it
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makes
it faster for
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people
to
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learn
in a specified time frame.
For instance
, when I relocated to Germany, speaking
as well
as writing German was difficult at
first
,
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but
with continuous communication with the nationals, I was perfect in it in 2 years time.
Presently
, I can communicate with German,
also
participate in their tradition.

However
, a foreign
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language
and custom can
also
be
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learnt
without living in the country. There are a number of
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language
schools with professional tutors where
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people
have
successfully
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learnt
a second
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language
. These schools are in almost every country which enables anyone
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seeking
to
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learn
another
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language
of choice to enroll and
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learn
as opposed to living with the nationals. To give a
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clear
example, my wife was able to
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learn
French
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language
and
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culture
in Nigeria within eighteen months by
successfully
completing a French
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language
course,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
it is almost impossible to distinguish her from French nationals.
Furthermore
, internet has
also
made it easy for
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people
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
of a certain nation by surfing through websites such as Google and Wikipedia.

To conclude
, due to complexity of any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
and its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
, it is always easy to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
one by residing with the native speakers in their country,
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but
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people
can
also
be taught
through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
schools and internet anywhere in the world.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that living in a country for a period of time is needed to learn the language and culture. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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