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Some people think that living in a country for a period of time is needed to learn the language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that living in a country for a period of time is needed to learn the language and culture. v. 1
When discussing the advatages associated with living abroad, in order to gain better language skills, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue. Although some people think it is not efficient to leave abroad, due to the financial costs, others believe it is vital in order to fully absorb the culture and society of the country. In my opinion, staying in a foreign place gives a substantially deeper insight to the country's language and culture, and should be done when possible. In this essay, I will give reasons and explenations to my argument. One explenation in favor of my opinion, is that when staying as a foreigner in a specific country, you will undoubtadly experience greater exposure to the local language, in comparison to other people. For example, a recent research from Harvard University, reported that people living in a non-native speaking country, were able to read the local newspaper within 4 months, in contrast to people who studied at the local University. This example shows, that when leaving abroad, people are exposed to the local language much more, and as a result, learn to talk and read the local language much faster. Another argument supporting my opinion is that by visiting a far away place, we encounter historical sites, and see with our own eyes places of great importance. By seeing these locations, instead of reading about it, we learn much more in regards to the local history and culture. As an example, a recent poll by the Israeli Tourist Organization, reported that 20% of the people who visited Israel during 2015, changed their opinion about the Jewish people's right to leave in Israel. This demonstrates, that by visiting and staying in a specific place we can truely understand and absorb the local culture, much more then reading about it. In conclusion, I maintain that if one is interested in absorbing a country's language and culture, he should leave their for a perid of time. it is the fastest and best way to know it.
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advatages
associated with living abroad, in order to gain better
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people
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think
it is not efficient to
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abroad, due to the financial costs, others believe it is vital in order to
fully
absorb the
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culture
and society of the country. In my
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opinion
, staying in a foreign
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place
gives a
substantially
deeper insight to the country's
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language
and
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culture
, and should
be done
when possible. In this essay, I will give reasons and
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explenations
to my argument.

One
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explenation
in favor of my
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opinion
, is that when staying as a foreigner in a specific country, you will
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undoubtadly
experience greater exposure to the
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local
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language
,
in comparison
to other
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people
.
For example
, a recent research from Harvard University, reported that
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people
living in a non-native speaking country, were able to read the
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local
newspaper within 4 months,
in contrast
to
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people
who studied at the
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local
University. This example
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, that when leaving abroad,
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people
are exposed
to the
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local
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language
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much
more, and
as a result
, learn to talk and read the
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local
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language
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much
faster.

Another argument supporting my
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opinion
is that by visiting a far away
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place
, we encounter historical sites, and
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see
with our
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own
eyes
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places
of great importance. By seeing these locations,
instead
of reading about it, we learn
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much
more
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in regards to
the
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local
history and
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culture
. As an example, a recent poll by the Israeli Tourist Organization, reported that 20% of the
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people
who visited Israel during 2015,
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changed
their
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opinion
about the Jewish
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people
's right to
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leave
in Israel. This demonstrates, that by visiting and staying in a specific
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place
we can
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truely
understand and absorb the
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local
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culture
,
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much
more
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reading about it.

In conclusion
, I maintain that if one
is interested
in absorbing a country's
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language
and
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culture
, he should
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their for a
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perid
of time.
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With languages, you are at home anywhere.
Edward De Waal

IELTS essay Some people think that living in a country for a period of time is needed to learn the language and culture. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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