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Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than expecting individuals to take responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples. v.1

Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than expecting individuals to take responsibility. with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples. v. 1
Although ordinary people in some case are cause of pollution about environment destruction, the governments and huge institutions are responsible, too. In my opinion, the second group have more effect on environment and they should step in and modify their behavior to improve situation. In spite of the reality that folks are the main cause of contaminating in some areas such as beaches or streets, but depending on social background, there are special groups who clean their circumstances voluntarily and they negate the bad effects of villain people. I believe that governments and companies impose worse effects than individuals and they should cooperate to minimize harmful marginal effects. The governments should make new policy about Environmental activities to reduce its undesirable results on the environment and encourage individuals and companies to save environment. Thus, the governments and corporates should help persons to protect safe and clean environment. The governments through mayors can construct parks and green spaces to make beautiful scenery. Likewise they could limit harmful activities such as cut the trees to make new roads. Big companies should be banned to don not release their waste material into environment, instead by Research and Development (R&D) discover new methods to recycle waste material into useful goods. Individuals, also, support the governments and take care of their surroundings, because safe environment is direct effect on their healthiness. In conclusion, environmental change is related to any activity on behalf of individuals, governments, and companies. Every side can play its duty to protect the environment. To achieve this all of the groups should collaborate to make a great condition to live.
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some
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are cause of pollution about
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environment
destruction, the
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governments
and huge institutions are responsible, too. In my opinion, the second group have more
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effect
on
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environment and
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improve
situation.

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the reality that folks are the main cause of contaminating in
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some
areas such as beaches or streets,
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but
depending on social background, there are special groups who clean their circumstances
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voluntarily and
they negate the
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bad
effects of villain
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people
. I believe that
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governments
and
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companies
impose worse effects than
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individuals and
they should cooperate to minimize harmful marginal effects. The
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governments
should
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make
new policy about Environmental activities to
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reduce
its undesirable results on the
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environment
and encourage
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individuals
and
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companies
to save environment.

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, the
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governments
and
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corporates
should
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help
persons to protect safe and clean
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environment
. The
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governments
through mayors can construct parks and green spaces to
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make
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beautiful
scenery.
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Likewise
they could limit harmful activities such as
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cut
the trees to
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new roads.
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Big
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companies
should
be banned
to
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release their waste material into
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environment
,
instead
by Research and Development (R&D) discover new methods to recycle waste material into useful
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goods
.
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Individuals
,
also
, support the
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governments
and take care of their surroundings,
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because
safe
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environment
is direct
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effect
on their healthiness.

In conclusion
, environmental
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change
is related
to any activity on behalf of
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individuals
,
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governments
, and
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companies
. Every side can play its duty to protect the
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environment
. To achieve this
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all of the
groups should collaborate to
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make
a great condition to
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live
.
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28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than expecting individuals to take responsibility. with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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