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some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.6

some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. v. 6
Some people think that the best idea to motivate, and encourage employees to work hard, is by telling them how they get paid by producing, and selling much. There are many ways to motivate, and encourage people to work hard. A way to make them believe that they are the owner of the community, and make the employees happy are some better ways. In one hand, a company manager should create a good situation for the employees, to make the workers think, and believe, that they are the owner of the firm. Trying to make them feel that the place they are working to be their own, and always praise them after they do their job, like the words "great job, or you are doing well" will eager them to work much better. In addition, helping them to understand their job, and tell them how they get money to maintain the existence of the community. Words as" if the customers happy, they will order more stuff, later on, we can produce more goods, and sell more". Those words make them think that they earn money from producing, and selling. Furthermore, set an achievement goal. So they can get well paid from the result of what they do. In spite of it, make them happy is the other ways to motivate, and encourage the workers. Through reward. For examples: an allowance, a bonus, or a trip ticket for holiday, will make them stick to the community. Good employees are the treasure of the party, for these people bring much money as the result of satisfaction, and not under pressure. A research which is done by at the end of a semester student found a result that: this is the most important way the manager should do. In conclusion, I do not agree when most people say that the best idea to motivate, and encourage the people to perform hard is to pay them based on how much they produce, and sell. But ways like making the employees feel that they are the boss, and make them happy through giving reward when they reach the goals are the best ways.
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employees
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great job, or you are doing well
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, helping them to understand their job, and
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tell
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get
money to maintain the existence of the community. Words as
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if the customers
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, they will order more stuff, later on, we can produce more
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goods
, and sell more
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think
that they earn money from producing, and selling.
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ways
to
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make
them stick to the community.
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are the treasure of the party, for these
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bring
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much
money as the result of satisfaction, and not under pressure. A research which
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end
of a semester student found a result that: this is the most
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the manager should do.

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, I do not
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say that the best
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to
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motivate
, and
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encourage
the
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people
to perform
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hard
is to pay them based on how
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much
they produce, and sell.
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ways
like making the
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employees
feel that they are the boss, and
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make
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through giving reward when they reach the goals are the best
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.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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