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Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money, so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money, so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. v. 1
t is commonly argued that since reading books on cutting-edge technological devices can save resources, libraries ought to be abandoned. While some people prefer the indigenous style of reading books in covered places, I believe that we should opt for technological gadgets for reading books. It is argued by some that it is advantageous to preserve libraries, no matter how far the technology has surpassed the old means. These people believe that unless one is not able to have a physical touch of a book, the mind will not be able to extract the real meaning written in a book. For example, recent research conducted by Oxford University showed that the human mind is subject to better understand and respond to a material when a person reading can feel it. Moreover, libraries provide a perfect environment for book reading where once a person has a membership, he/she is compelled to come regularly and read. All these reasons push some people to prefer reading in libraries. Nonetheless, I opine that computers are the best option to use when it comes to reading books. These devices are not bound by the need for a specified place and are a much cheaper option. With regard to the former, anyone can read a desired book on a smart computer, such as I-pads and Kindle, around the globe. All the books will be available in a cloud-based server, allowing its access to its members. As far as cost is concerned, usually there is a minimal annual fee which covers access to all books without any restriction on the number of books one could read or how long one surf reading. This provides an ease for the users to compare and contrast a variety of books, especially for university students. All these conveniences compel me to choose computer-based E-books over hard copies. To conclude, people have varying views on the existence of libraries. Although some still finds it beneficial to study in a library, I believe that we should benefit from the computers and use the applications available there to read books because there are almost no costs associated with this.
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on cutting-edge technological devices can save resources, libraries ought to
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. While
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prefer the indigenous style of
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in covered places, I believe that we should opt for technological gadgets for
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books.

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is argued
by
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some
that it is advantageous to preserve libraries, no matter how far the technology has surpassed the
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old
means. These
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people
believe that unless one is not able to have a physical touch of a
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book
, the mind will not be able to extract the real meaning written in a
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book
.
For example
, recent research conducted by Oxford University
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showed
that the human mind is subject to better understand and respond to a material when a person
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reading
can feel it.
Moreover
, libraries provide a perfect environment for
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book
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reading
where once a person has a membership, he/she
is compelled
to
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come
regularly
and
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read
. All these reasons push
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people
to prefer
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in libraries.

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when it
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. These devices are not bound by the need for a specified place and are a much cheaper option. With regard to the former, anyone can
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read
a desired
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book
on a smart computer, such as I-pads and Kindle, around the globe. All the
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books
will be available in a cloud-based server, allowing its access to its members. As far as cost
is concerned
,
usually
there is a minimal annual fee which covers access to all
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books
without any restriction on the number of
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books
one could
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read
or how long one surf
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reading
. This provides an
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ease
for the users to compare and contrast a variety of
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books
,
especially
for university students. All these conveniences compel me to choose computer-based E-books over
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hard
copies.

To conclude
,
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people
have varying views on the existence of libraries. Although
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some
still
finds it beneficial to study in a library, I believe that we should benefit from the computers and
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use
the applications available there to
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read
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books
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because
there are almost no costs associated with this.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money, so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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