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some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.11

some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. v. 11
Some people think that libraries are better than e-libraries and like the old-fashioned way of reading, whilst others think that this is not a cost-effective way and should be replaced, which seems to be a logical argue. Firstly, some readers naively suggest that libraries have been the major source of books for many years, and people are used to go to libraries to study, being a quiet place and easier to concentrate. Secondly, they think that provided one wants to access to a vast number of books, he can enroll in a library and have a hand on many books easily. This, however, appears to be not true. Hardly can a library has all the books that, for example, a college student needs. Finally, they argue that it is cheaper to rent a book rather than buying it. All these points can be achieved by using computer in a straightforward and cost-effective way which is computer-based tools. Some people, on the other hand, claim that with purchasing an e-book reader like Kindle, produced by amazon, it can bring about all the needs of a reader. Using paper books can cause damage to our environment, in that publishing a book requires logging and needs lots of water. E-book readers, however, can solve these problems with replacing it with digital books that do not need papers. Firstly, some might argue that it is not suitable for our eyes and we may loose our eyesight. Thanks to new technologies, e-book readers can simulate papers and do not harm our eyes at all. Secondly, they may suggest that e-book readers are very expensive and are not costly efficient. To answer this issue, many online libraries provide a monthly subscription for books that in the long run would be more budget-friendly for us to use them. Although some people prefer paper books, it is much better for ourselves and our environment to use computers instead. Not only can they be more healthier, but also they are cheaper. So it would be in all our interest to use computers rather than paper books.
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Some
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people
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think
that libraries are better than e-libraries and like the
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old
-fashioned way of reading, whilst others
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think
that this is not a cost-effective way and should
be replaced
, which seems to be a logical argue.

Firstly
,
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some
readers
naively
suggest that libraries have been the major source of
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books
for
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many
years, and
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people
are
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used
to go to libraries to study, being a quiet place and easier to concentrate.
Secondly
, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that provided one wants to access to a vast number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
, he can enroll in a library and have a hand on
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
easily
. This,
however
, appears to be not true. Hardly can a library has all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
that,
for example
, a college student
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needs
.
Finally
, they argue that it is cheaper to rent a
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book
rather
than buying it. All these points can
be achieved
by using computer in a straightforward and cost-effective way which is computer-based tools.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
,
on the other hand
, claim that with purchasing an e-book reader like Kindle, produced by
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amazon
, it can bring about all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
of a reader. Using paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
can cause damage to our environment, in that publishing a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
requires logging and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
lots of water. E-book readers,
however
, can solve these problems with replacing it with digital
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
that do not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
papers.
Firstly
,
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some
might argue that it is not suitable for our
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eyes and
we may
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loose
our eyesight. Thanks to new technologies, e-book readers can simulate papers and do not harm our eyes at all.
Secondly
, they may suggest that e-book readers are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
expensive and are not costly efficient. To answer this issue,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
online libraries provide a monthly subscription for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
that in the long run would be more budget-friendly for us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
them.

Although
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some
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people
prefer paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
, it is much better for ourselves and our environment to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
computers
instead
. Not
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only
can they be
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more healthier
,
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but
also
they are cheaper.
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So
it would be in all our interest to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
computers
rather
than paper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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