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Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. v. 2
In the contemporary era of technology and computers, few believe that libraries are mere the wastage of paper money and the crucial resources, whose use can be easily replaced with the computer's. On the contrary, others are of the opinion that nothing can replace the use of written textbooks and journals. Below paragraphs will shed some light on both views and reasons of their assertion. One side is of the favour that libraries are the one of the multi-bagger investment and nothing can replace their role. This school of thought believes in this because of the various reasons. Mainly, computers are in this world for more than three decades and even with the help of these supercomputers, space travel becomes reality, but still more and more libraries are getting introduced in the system. Secondly, authenticity of the information is also a major contributor in the existence of libraries. For instance, on the internet, there are numerous hoax websites which cannot be trusted for news and people cross verify the information in the newspapers and magazines as the publication are bound to print the authentic material and spending resources for the trusted information will always be better. Others believe that in the fast paced lives, no one has time to travel to the libraries to satiate their thirst of knowledge which can be easily fulfilled at home with the access to the internet. Furthermore, computers are replacing man power in the factories, industries and even teachers in many universities have been replaced with the recorded online courses and smart labs. In the same manner, libraries will be obsolete in the future and investing valuable resources in the thing of no longer use is also a wastage. Both groups have their own thought and assumptions which make them believe that computers should replace the libraries and others believe that libraries cannot be replaced with today's new inventions. In my opinion, usage of libraries for reading hard books and to feel the touch of the paper cannot be replaced with the electronic books, though libraries will be of lesser use in future due to increasing options. Moreover, both the things should go hand in hand as the incorporation of computers in the library will serve the purpose.
In the contemporary era of technology and computers, few
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believe
that libraries are mere the wastage of paper money and the crucial resources, whose
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use
can be
easily
replaced with the computer's.
On the contrary
, others are of the opinion that nothing can replace the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of written textbooks and journals. Below paragraphs will shed
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some
light on both views and reasons of their assertion.

One side is of the
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favour
that libraries are the one of the
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multi-bagger
investment and nothing can replace their role. This school of
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thought
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believes
in this
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because
of the various reasons.
Mainly
, computers are in this world for more than three decades and even with the
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help
of these supercomputers, space travel becomes reality,
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but
still
more and more libraries are getting introduced in the system.
Secondly
, authenticity of the information is
also
a major contributor in the existence of libraries.
For instance
, on the internet, there are numerous hoax websites which cannot
be trusted
for news and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
cross verify the information in the newspapers and magazines as the publication
are bound
to print the authentic material and spending resources for the trusted information will always be better.

Others
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believe
that in the
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fast
paced
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lives
, no one has time to travel to the libraries to satiate their thirst of knowledge which can be
easily
fulfilled at home with the access to the internet.
Furthermore
, computers are replacing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
power in the factories, industries and even teachers in
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many
universities have
been replaced
with the recorded online courses and smart labs. In the same manner, libraries will be obsolete in the future and investing valuable resources in the thing of no longer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
is
also
a wastage.

Both groups have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
and assumptions which
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make
them
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believe
that computers should replace the libraries
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and others
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that libraries cannot
be replaced
with
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today
's new inventions. In my opinion, usage of libraries for reading
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
books and to feel the touch of the paper cannot
be replaced
with the electronic books, though libraries will be of lesser
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
in future due to increasing options.
Moreover
, both the things should go hand in hand as the incorporation of computers in the library will serve the purpose.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
374 words
6.5
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