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Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. v. 1
The primary purpose of tertiary education is to prepare graduates for their future career. While thousands of people would enrol for the sake of acquiring general knowledge and skills which will make them competitive in the work market, there is a portion of them who would expect to obtain the specific qualifications only for their dream position. Therefore, I strongly believe that universities should organise their courses’ programs in order to provide future employees with all the skill sharpening professional training for their specific occupation. One compelling reason for this is that all the contemporary occupations nowadays are task specific which makes it a necessity for workers to be able to comply with every task requirement. Once they graduate they are expected to take over all the responsibilities their career needs them to do, have the know-how, as well as the expertise to carry out all the arduous and demanding tasks. For instance, as soon as I graduated from the Faculty of Philology I had to take a part-time teaching position. I was overwhelmed with all the expectations my employer had in everyday practice, whereas there was no need at all of all the theory I had mastered throughout my studies. On the other hand, it is beyond doubt that most of the jobs would require employees to do a lot of multi-tasking and to be capable of meeting deadlines while conducting project work. Apparently, big companies would prefer to employ a person well-equipped with all the necessary knowledge related to several positions within their range, instead of over-staffing. Notwithstanding the competitiveness among businesses, there is always a huge demand for the top notch professionals within one sector. This will be possible, only and only if universities raise their standards and provide broad education and practice for their students. In conclusion, I would maintain that tertiary education should be more content-specific and ensure the fastest and highest quality for their graduates. Not only will professionals be able to use their university knowledge as a catalyst towards their career, but they will be able to make a living out of it for a lifetime.
The primary purpose of tertiary education is to prepare graduates for their future career. While thousands of
people
would enrol for the sake of acquiring general knowledge and
skills
which will
make
them competitive in the work market, there is a portion of them who would
expect
to obtain the specific qualifications
only
for their dream position.
Therefore
, I
strongly
believe that universities should
organise
their courses’ programs in order to provide future employees with all the
skill
sharpening professional training for their specific occupation.

One compelling reason for this is that all the contemporary occupations nowadays are task specific which
makes
it a necessity for workers to be able to comply with every task requirement. Once they graduate they are
expected
to take over all the responsibilities their career needs them to do, have the know-how,
as well
as the expertise to carry out all the arduous and demanding tasks.
For instance
, as
soon
as I graduated from the Faculty of Philology I had to take a part-time teaching position. I
was overwhelmed
with all the expectations my employer had in everyday practice, whereas there was no need at all of all the theory I had mastered throughout my studies.

On the other hand
, it is beyond doubt that most of the jobs would require employees to do
a lot of
multi-tasking and to be capable of meeting deadlines while conducting project work.
Apparently
,
big
companies
would prefer to employ a person well-equipped with all the necessary knowledge related to several positions within their range,
instead
of over-staffing. Notwithstanding the competitiveness among businesses, there is always a huge demand for the
top notch
professionals within one sector. This will be possible,
only
and
only
if universities raise their standards and provide broad education and practice for their students.

In conclusion
, I would maintain that tertiary education should be more content-specific and ensure the fastest and highest quality for their graduates. Not
only
will professionals be able to
use
their university knowledge as a catalyst towards their career,
but
they will be able to
make
a living out of it for a lifetime.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
7.5
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