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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
According to some people bigger companies and industrial sectors should be moved to the rural areas. In this essay I will discuss both Advantages and Disadvantages of moving major companies and industrial sectors to the russet range and provide a logical conclusion. The Two main Advantages of moving to the rural areas are the significant decrease in air, water, noise pollution and urbanizing peasant areas. Companies and industries produce a large figure of by-products as waste Also, proper disposal requires a large number of space which isn’t readily available in the city. For Example, if companies are situated in urban areas, they will not be able to treat the waste properly due to space constraints, as a result cities become polluted by waste products. Countries where is no industry development, Moving companies in the rural areas will aid evolve industrial direction as marketing promotion and renewed manufactory construction. For instance, Building various structures is not urbanized areas will assist with development to the consummate elevation. In other words, Moving industrial to the countryside is a great way to reduce pollution and urbanizing rural areas. But Moving to the rural areas has some major disadvantages like a major drawback to moving industries, companies to the suburbs and abundance people in the scenery. Industries and companies afford employment to many people around the area. For instance, If they shift to a farther location, it will lead to unemployment in cities and will also encourage more people to move to the countryside. The number of people in the countryside will increase two times more which will make the issues as surplus people and job overflow. To illustrate, People move to obtain a job, as a result of which the number of people in the countryside will increase dramatically. Therefore, People moving to rural areas with a target obtain job will issues like as companies to the suburbs and excess people. To summarize, It is often thought by some that large companies and industries will benefit more if they move from urban areas to rural areas. In Short, the Benefits of proposition outnumber the drawbacks.
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sectors should be
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. In this essay I will discuss both Advantages and Disadvantages of
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sectors to the russet range and provide a logical conclusion.

The Two main Advantages of
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moving
to the
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rural
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are the significant decrease in air, water, noise pollution and urbanizing peasant
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areas
.
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Companies
and
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industries
produce a large figure of by-products as waste
Also
, proper disposal requires
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a large number of
space which isn’t
readily
available in the city.
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, if
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companies
are situated
in urban
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areas
, they will not be able to treat the waste
properly
due to space constraints,
as a result
cities become polluted by waste products. Countries where is no
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industry
development,
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companies
in the
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rural
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will aid evolve
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direction as marketing promotion and renewed
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manufactory
construction.
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will assist with development to the consummate elevation.
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,
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industrial
to the
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countryside
is a great way to
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reduce
pollution and urbanizing
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rural
areas.

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to the
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has
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major disadvantages like a major drawback to
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,
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to the suburbs and abundance
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in the scenery.
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and
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afford employment to
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many
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people
around the
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area
.
For instance
, If they shift to a farther location, it will lead to unemployment in cities and will
also
encourage more
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to
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to the
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. The number of
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in the
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will increase two times more which will
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the issues as surplus
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people
and job overflow. To illustrate,
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to obtain a job,
as a result
of which the number of
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in the
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will increase
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with a target obtain job will
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issues
like as
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to the suburbs and excess
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will benefit more if they
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. In Short, the Benefits of proposition outnumber the drawbacks.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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