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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.14

In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 14
In present, the new development technology has been admiring the economy for nations. In that the extremely large level of job and new opportunities are available and that can get high pay for new employees it's good for the country; However, few mankind believes that national society gets to rule for employment to a certain level of working paid. Also, the government is more restriction on the company for paying to their employees. If asked to support, I partially agree with the given statement and that elaborated further. Modern development country has small numbers of people they get extremely paid for their job. Moreover, they can not too much work rather than the other hard-working job because those humans could a perfect period to work. The other thing is that they can quality work so some believe that this is good for our country and also the growth of our economy. For instance, a fresher student is working on the largest IT company in this he can give a particular period to complete his work. Additionally, he has to smart work and gets more salary. Those types of jobs such as teacher, manager, accountant and many more. On the other hand, a few credits that the governments should make very hard rules for the employees that’s the people cannot stratified with this law. In that our government has to make a few levels are demonstrated categories of job and its paid. For example, an engineer is working on a machinery company in that he works a lot and its salary is very low that the people not stratified with government rules and regulations. So, people believe that that’s not perfect for the growing country. To conclude, hard-working people have not much salaries, while, the small work or the smart-working people has high paid. In my opinion, the government should change the rule for the company as well as the employees to get work and its paid.
In present, the new development technology has been admiring the economy for nations. In that the
extremely
large level of
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job
and new opportunities are available and that can
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get
high pay for new
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employees
it's
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good
for the country;
However
,
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few mankind
believes that national society
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gets
to
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rule
for employment to a certain level of working
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paid
.
Also
, the
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government
is more restriction on the
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company
for paying to their
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employees
. If asked to support, I
partially
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agree
with the
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given
statement and that elaborated
further
.

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small
numbers of
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people
they
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get
extremely
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paid
for their
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job
.
Moreover
, they can not too much
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work
rather
than the other
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hard
-working
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job
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because
those humans could a perfect period to
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work
. The other thing is that they can quality
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work
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so
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some
believe that this is
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good
for our country and
also
the growth of our economy.
For instance
, a fresher student is working on the largest IT
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company
in this he can give a particular period to complete his
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work
.
Additionally
, he
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has to
smart
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work
and
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gets
more salary. Those types of
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jobs
such as teacher, manager, accountant and
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many
more.

On the other hand
, a few credits that the
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governments
should
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make
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very
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hard
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rules
for the
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employees
that’s the
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people
cannot
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stratified
with this law. In that our
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government
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has to
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make
a few levels
are demonstrated
categories of
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job
and its
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paid
.
For example
, an engineer is working on a machinery
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company
in that he works a lot and its salary is
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very
low that the
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people
not stratified with
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government
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rules
and regulations.
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So
,
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people
believe
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that that
’s not perfect for the growing country.

To conclude
,
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hard
-working
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people
have not
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much
salaries, while, the
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small
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work
or the smart-working
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people
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has
high
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paid
. In my opinion, the
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government
should
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change
the
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rule
for the
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company
as well
as the
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employees
to
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get
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work
and its
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paid
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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