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Some people think that it is vital to donate money in constructing to new railway line, while others believe that improving the existing one is better. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that it is vital to donate money in constructing to new railway line, while others believe that improving the existing one is better. v. 1
Every citizen has a right to receive free medical care which is supported by their government. This can have both positive and negative implications. There are several advantages which can be reaped from free health care, the most important of which are the increase in the number of treated patients and the reduction of disease outbreaks. As the former, medical services and treatments are quite costly and the majority of the people, especially the poor, cannot afford it. In fact, expensive health care costs being from prescription charges and treatment costs prevent a great number of these people from meeting doctors to treat minor diseases. In this way, most people having a low income in a society can suffer from their diseases for a long time, which certainly makes them be worse. The government, therefore, has to intervene and make the health care affordable for all and provide free services for poor citizens. Another benefit could be that the spread of disease is possibly controlled by providing free medical services and bringing people under the umbrella at the quality treatment. A great deal of people tends to make an appointment to see the doctor on a regular basis, which leads to the fact that a health condition probably is much better recovery. In other words, some epidemics are no longer spread among the population. Despite the aforementioned benefits, free medical services can have several downsides, which are worth being considered. One of the main issues is that supporting free treatment for all requires a huge budget, which is exceedingly difficult for the government in poor and developing countries to manage it. The state budget of these nations often accounts for economic development as a priority; hence, a huge investment in medical services apparently increases the risk of the economy and other fields. In addition, the lack of doctors and trained nurses can have a detrimental effect on the quality of medical health care. In fact, there is a dramatic decrease in the number of successful treatments since hospitals and medical centers frequently overload with patients. For instance, a doctor has to meet and take care of a large number of patients, which results in a plunge of the concentration and productivity of medical staff. This poses a threat to the treatments of patients and these people seem to be tired due to a long waiting time to see doctors for treatments. In conclusion, while free health care services can be beneficial, it also has several drawbacks.
Every citizen has a right to receive
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free
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medical
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care
which
is supported
by their
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government
. This can have both
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positive
and
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negative
implications.

There are several advantages which can
be reaped
from
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free
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health
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care
, the most
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important
of which are the increase in the
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number
of treated
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patients
and the reduction of
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disease
outbreaks. As the former,
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medical
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services
and
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treatments
are quite costly and the majority of the
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people
,
especially
the poor, cannot afford it. In fact, expensive
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health
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care
costs being from prescription charges and
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treatment
costs
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prevent
a great
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number
of these
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people
from meeting
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doctors
to treat minor
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diseases
. In this way, most
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people
having a low income in a society can suffer from their
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diseases
for a long time, which
certainly
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makes
them be worse. The
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government
,
therefore
,
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has to
intervene and
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make
the
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health
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care
affordable for all and provide
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free
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services
for poor citizens. Another benefit could be that the spread of
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disease
is
possibly
controlled by providing
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free
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medical
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services
and bringing
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people
under the umbrella at the quality
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treatment
. A great deal of
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people
tends to
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make
an appointment to
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see
the
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doctor
on a regular basis, which leads to the fact that a
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health
condition
probably
is much better recovery.
In other words
,
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some
epidemics are no longer spread among the population.

Despite the aforementioned benefits,
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free
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medical
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services
can have several downsides, which are worth
being considered
. One of the main issues is that supporting
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free
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treatment
for all requires a huge budget, which is
exceedingly
difficult for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
in poor and
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developing countries
to manage it. The state budget of these nations
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often
accounts for economic development as a priority;
hence
, a huge investment in
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medical
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services
apparently
increases the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of the economy and other fields.
In addition
, the lack of
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doctors
and trained nurses can have a detrimental effect on the quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
care
. In fact, there is a dramatic decrease in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of successful
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treatments
since hospitals and
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medical
centers
frequently
overload with
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patients
.
For instance
, a
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doctor
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has to
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meet
and take
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care
of a large
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number
of
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patients
, which results in a plunge of the concentration and productivity of
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medical
staff. This poses a threat to the
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treatments
of
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patients
and these
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people
seem to
be tired
due to a long waiting time to
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see
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doctors
for treatments.

In conclusion
, while
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free
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health
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care
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services
can be beneficial, it
also
has several drawbacks.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that it is vital to donate money in constructing to new railway line, while others believe that improving the existing one is better. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
416 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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