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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway line for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion v.10

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway line for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. 10
In the modern world some people think it is compulsory to use a large amount of money for development of new railway lines for fast track from one city to 2nd city. However, but other people think the government would upgrade the older public transport and spend money. In my opinion, I think both are important because if we improve the railway lines then they consume less time and the public transportation upgrade there will be comfortable for the national people. Firstly, the government should government should improve the train tracks because it's very important for businessmen and some people who you want to go another city in a short time, there will be beneficial for them. Moreover, it is also beneficial for our economy because then more people use, fast train and less compared to the airlines. Secondly, it is important for safety. For example, if you have any emergency patient want to the Lahore for operation, it will be taken 3 hours, but what if we make fast track then and it took a half hour. However, if we improve local buses then and majority values will use public transport. Because it's very comfortable. Furthermore it will be improve their technology for our self. For instance, if our technology is better like electric car which is nowadays it’s the best method and I help them to improve the environment and clean the air. In conclusion, after getting all information I reach on my conclusion both are things for important to develop our country
In the modern world
some
people
think
it is compulsory to
use
a large amount of money for development of new railway lines for
fast
track
from one city to 2nd city.
However
,
but
other
people
think
the
government
would upgrade the older public transport and spend money. In my opinion, I
think
both are
important
because
if we
improve
the railway lines then they consume less time and the public transportation upgrade there will be comfortable for the national
people
.

Firstly
, the
government
should
government
should
improve
the train
tracks
because
it's
very
important
for businessmen and
some
people
who you want to go another city in a short time, there will be beneficial for them.
Moreover
, it is
also
beneficial for our economy
because
then more
people
use
,
fast
train and less compared to the airlines.
Secondly
, it is
important
for safety.
For example
, if you have any emergency patient want to the Lahore for operation, it will
be taken
3 hours,
but
what if we
make
fast
track
then and it took a half hour.

However
, if we
improve
local buses then and majority values will
use
public transport.
Because
it's
very
comfortable.
Furthermore
it will be
improve
their technology for our self.
For instance
, if our technology is better like electric car which is nowadays it’s the best method and I
help
them to
improve
the environment and clean the air.

In conclusion
, after getting all information I reach on my conclusion both are things for
important
to develop our country
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway line for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. 10

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