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It is better for boys and girls to study separately rather than study in mixed sex classes. They are less distracted and this leads to better results. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

It is better for boys and girls to study separately rather than study in mixed sex classes. They are less distracted and this leads to better results. v. 1
In today’s era, people like to live in the urban area which provides modern facility and also attract people from the countryside as well. This essay will discuss the problems that faced by oldies who have to live alone in their home and to solve it government should start to develop the countryside. To begin with, one of the important problems is that the old one’s has to live alone in their native place as they want the development of their adults so, they allow them to leave the countryside. For example, in most of the urban areas having the opportunity where one should work and get the money to feed their family. Moreover, the countryside having less opportunity for the one’s development; it cannot contain any company’s which provides employment, so all the younger want to leave it and at last, only oldies were there, and no one is there to look them as well. On the other hand, to solve this problem government should start to build a new opportunity which, provides a large amount of employment, so people who live in this place never having thought to leave it. Even for the companies the countryside provides the large space in a less budget. For instance, most of the new company was developed in the countryside, it would be beneficial for owners as well nearby people in terms it serves job. Furthermore, there is no need to leave their native for the younger and they provide the support and care to their oldies as they deserve it; spent their later life healthy with their loved ones. In conclusion, While the countryside having less opportunity for the development so, a person from that place, travel to the urban area, but the government should start a new project in that place so, they live their life happily with their entire family.
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modern facility and
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people
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countryside
as well
. This essay will discuss the problems that faced by oldies who
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have to
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live
alone in their home and to solve it
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government
should
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start
to develop the countryside.

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important
problems is that the
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one’s
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alone in their native
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place
as they want the development of their adults
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.
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where one should work and
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get
the money to feed their family.
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, the
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countryside
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less
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opportunity
for the one’s development; it cannot contain any
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company
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employment,
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all the younger want to
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oldies were there, and no one is there to look them
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government
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to build a new
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opportunity
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a large amount of employment,
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so
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people
who
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never
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countryside
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provides
the large space in a less budget.
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, most of the new
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company
was developed
in the
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countryside
, it would be beneficial for owners
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nearby
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people
in terms it serves job.
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, there is no need to
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leave
their native for the
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younger and
they
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the support and care to their oldies as they deserve it; spent their later life healthy with their
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loved
ones.

In conclusion
, While the
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countryside
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less
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for the development
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so
, a person from that
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place
, travel to the urban area,
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but
the
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government
should
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start
a new project in that
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place
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so
, they
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live
their life
happily
with their entire family.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better for boys and girls to study separately rather than study in mixed sex classes. They are less distracted and this leads to better results. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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