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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.6

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 6
In recent times, the seamless modes of transport are often put on the spotlight. People from various countries perceive that, it is essential to upgrade their existing transport services be that as making dedicated railway lines for the bullet trains to run at a faster rate. On the contrary, there are others who opine that instead of making new railway lines or any new construction for transport, the funds should be used to upgrade their existing public transport which is in disarray. This essay will cover both the views with my opinion inclined towards the former. On the one hand, there are numerous advantages in building new railway lines for bullet trains to ply between two cities. As those high speed trains run on clean energy, thereby reducing the carbon imprint in the atmosphere as well as reducing the travel time to a greater extent for an affordable price. Although the cost to construct such state of the art facilities is soaring, the government is looking at a larger picture where the population level will be increased periodically and so these facilities are indispensable to mitigate its impact on the public transport. Moreover, the government can make up huge profits once people start using these facilities. Thereby, it can pay off its debts which it took to construct these facilities from various global institutions. On the other hand, nothing can be made on the fly. Building such huge facilities definitely need time and manpower. Instead of spending huge sum of money for building these services, the government can use those funds to improve their existing transport facilities like building bus rapid transit system, fixing the faulty railway lines and laying clean roads. For example, the road transport in Amritsar has been improved to a remarkable extent, soon after the government upgraded that to a Bus Rapid Transit system. It now caters to the needs of different kinds of people from farmers, students and employees. Moreover, building new amenities will also disturb the existing transport layouts which results in chaos and woeful traffic. To recapitulate, we cannot afford to live with legacy modes of transport, as the world is improving in better connectivity be that as transport or communication. Therefore, the government should come forward to improve the quality of life of its citizens by adapting to the new modes of transport based on clean energy models. If not, we would be digging our own graves to face a mighty oblivion.
In recent times, the seamless modes of
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transport
are
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often
put on the spotlight.
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People
from various countries perceive that, it is essential to upgrade their
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existing
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transport
services be that as making dedicated
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railway
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lines
for the bullet trains
Did you mean "running"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
to run
at a faster rate.
On the contrary
, there are others who opine that
instead
of making
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new
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railway
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lines
or any
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new
construction for
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transport
, the funds should be
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used
to upgrade their
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existing
public
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transport
which is in disarray. This essay will cover both the views with my opinion inclined towards the former.

On the one hand, there are numerous advantages in
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building
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new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lines
for bullet trains to
ply
between two cities. As those high speed trains run on clean energy, thereby reducing the carbon imprint in the atmosphere
as well
as reducing the travel time to a greater extent for an affordable price. Although the cost to construct such
Did you mean "state-of-the-art"?
state of the art
facilities is soaring, the
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government
is looking at a larger picture where the population level will
be increased
periodically
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
these facilities are indispensable to mitigate its impact on the public
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transport
.
Moreover
, the
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government
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
up huge profits once
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people
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start
using these facilities. Thereby, it can pay off its debts which it took to construct these facilities from various global institutions.

On the other hand
, nothing can
be made
on the
fly
.
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Building
such huge facilities definitely need time and manpower.
Instead
of spending huge sum of money for
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building
these services, the
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government
can
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use
those funds to
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improve
their
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existing
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transport
facilities like
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building
bus rapid transit system, fixing the faulty
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lines
and laying clean roads.
For example
, the road
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transport
in Amritsar has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
to a remarkable extent,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
after the
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government
upgraded that to a Bus Rapid Transit system. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
caters to the needs of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kinds of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
from farmers, students and employees.
Moreover
,
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building
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new
amenities will
also
disturb the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
existing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
layouts which results in chaos and woeful traffic.

To recapitulate, we cannot afford to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with legacy modes of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
, as the world is improving in better connectivity be that as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
or communication.
Therefore
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
forward to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the quality of life of its citizens by adapting to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
modes of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
based on clean energy models. If not, we would be digging our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
graves to face a mighty oblivion.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
410 words
6
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