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Some people think that it is more important lo plant trees in open areas of towns and cities than to build more housing. to what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that it is more important lo plant trees in open areas of towns and cities than to build more housing. v. 2
It is a matter of fact that plantation of trees is directly proportional for the healthy environmental condition. If asked, I firmly agree to the statement. This essay will highlight that this certainly is a rational approach that needs to be opted. My inclination is elaborated in the ensuing paragraph with examples. To support my argument, the foremost reason is, trees are considered as the originator of pure and fresh oxygen. If trees and plants are removed there would be imbalance created in environment. To illustrate this, in 2003, there was a small hole in the earths ozone layer. In a survey conducted by the professors of Environmental department at University of Sydney they came to conclusion that deforestation was the major cause of it. Architects and Civil Engineers kept on building luxurious apartments and removing natural vegetation due to which they had to suffer. In addition to that, when the forest and centuries are pulled out, not only the environmental conditional but wildlife also gets affected. Forest is the house of animals if it is taken away from them then it would be difficult to handle them. For example, in India near Chennai whole forest was replaced with the township of certain employees so the animals that lived there came into the residential area and killed people. So unfortunately, people asked the builder to shift their stay to new and safer place and the problem was solved. Moreover, trees also acts as food for herbivorous and omnivorous animals. And these both are consumed by carnivorous animals. Hence, it would also affect food chain. To conclude, if trees are grown there would be balance in environmental cycle as well as wildlife cycles. Government should also take preventive measures to tackle the situation and one of the solution is the number of trees cut out for building residence, the same amount of trees should be planted at other place.
It is a matter of fact that plantation of
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trees
is
directly
proportional for the healthy
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environmental
condition. If asked, I
firmly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
to the statement. This essay will highlight that this
certainly
is a rational approach that needs to
be opted
. My inclination
is elaborated
in the ensuing paragraph with examples.

To support my argument, the foremost reason is,
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trees
are considered
as the originator of pure and fresh oxygen. If
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trees
and plants
are removed
there would be imbalance created in environment. To illustrate this, in 2003, there was a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
hole in the
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earths
ozone layer. In a survey conducted by the professors of
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Environmental
department at University of Sydney they came to conclusion that deforestation was the major cause of it. Architects and Civil Engineers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
on building luxurious apartments and removing natural vegetation due to which they had to suffer.

In addition
to that, when the forest and centuries
are pulled
out, not
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only
the
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environmental
conditional
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but
wildlife
also
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gets
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affected
. Forest is the
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house
of
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animals
if it
is taken
away from them then it would be difficult to handle them.
For example
, in India near Chennai whole forest
was replaced
with the township of certain employees
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so
the
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animals
that
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lived
there came into the residential area and killed
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people
.
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So
unfortunately,
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people
asked the builder to shift their stay to new and safer place and the problem
was solved
.

Moreover
,
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trees
also
acts as food for herbivorous and omnivorous
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animals
. And these both
are consumed
by carnivorous
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animals
.
Hence
, it would
also
affect food chain.

To conclude
, if
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trees
are grown
there would be balance in
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environmental
cycle
as well
as wildlife cycles.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should
also
take preventive measures to tackle the situation and one of the solution is the number of
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trees
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cut
out for building residence, the same amount of
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trees
should
be planted
at other place.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that it is more important lo plant trees in open areas of towns and cities than to build more housing. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
318 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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