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Some people think that it is more important to plant more trees in open area which in towns and cities than build more housing. To what extent do agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that it is more important to plant more trees in open area which in towns and cities than build more housing. v. 1
At the present time, the pollution is one of the biggest concerns for everyone and noise pollution is one of them. A group of people is suggesting, that there should be strict rules and regulations, in order to control the amount of sound a person produces, as many people are disturbed by the noise. This essay will discuss the positives and negatives of this point of view in detail. As it is seen that nowadays many people, especially the young generation, play songs with a very loud music, the idea to impose penalty seems very appealing. As a result, everyone will be careful about the level of noise he makes, which will certainly help to reduce the noise pollution. In addition, as the sound will be within a limited range, people hearing will be much healthier. A recent study has shown, that those who listen to very high music tend to have a worse hearing than those who listen to soft music. On the other hand, implementing strict laws to control the amount of noise, may affect our freedom of choice. If hard regulations are made, in order to limit the amount of noise a person makes, it will also burden the law enforcing agency with additional tasks. Moreover, it is also very difficult to implement in practice, as it seems to be very troublesome to precisely calculate the amount of noise someone produces. To sum up, noise pollution is one of the current problems, which we are facing today. Although many are thinking to tighten rules and regulations, so that the amount of noise someone produces stays within limits, there are some problems with this approach as well.
At the present time, the
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pollution
is one of the biggest concerns for everyone and
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noise
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pollution
is one of them. A group of
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people
is suggesting, that there should be strict
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rules
and regulations, in order to control the
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amount
of sound a person produces, as
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many
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people
are disturbed
by the
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noise
. This essay will discuss the positives and negatives of this point of view in detail.

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seen
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people
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the young generation, play songs with a
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very
loud music, the
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idea
to impose penalty seems
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very
appealing.
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, everyone will be careful about the level of
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noise
he
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help
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reduce
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noise
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pollution
.
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, as the sound will be within a limited range,
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people
hearing will be much healthier. A recent study has shown, that those who listen to
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very
high music tend to have a worse hearing than those who listen to soft music.

On the other hand
, implementing strict laws to control the
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amount
of
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noise
, may affect our freedom of choice. If
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hard
regulations
are made
, in order to limit the
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amount
of
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noise
a person
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makes
, it will
also
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, it is
also
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difficult to implement in practice, as it seems to be
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very
troublesome to
precisely
calculate the
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amount
of
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noise
someone produces.

To sum up,
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noise
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pollution
is one of the
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current
problems, which we are facing
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today
. Although
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many
are thinking to tighten
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rules
and regulations,
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so
that the
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amount
of
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noise
someone produces stays within limits, there are
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some
problems with this approach
as well
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is more important to plant more trees in open area which in towns and cities than build more housing. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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