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People's health will be lower in future then now. To what extend you agree or disagree with this, Give examples from your own knowledge. v.1

People's health will be lower in future then now. v. 1
It is certain that there will be a lot of differences in the lifestyles of the people in the coming time. To be specific, wellness will deteriorate as time passes ahead. As I strongly agree with this statement, this essay will discuss the possible causes such as food habits and pollution. To begin with, the main source of well being of an individual is the food that he eats. Earlier many families used to prefer homemade meals, which are in turn good for health, compared to fast food or ready to cook varieties, high in unsaturated fats and preservatives that make a person obese. But this trend seems to be changing as both parents are working in most families and all members rely on outside sources for eating. This can be exemplified with school children eating unhealthy junk food have higher chances of faltered health in future. I feel this, in turn, shows how bad food habits will cause weak health in the coming era. Another significant factor for the high health risks in future is the environment that surrounds us. People from the old generations used to live longer than today’s population because the environment was free from pollution. But now, however, research suggests that the air and water pollution will reach its peak in the future and it is capable of making humans very sick. To describe, people living in Delhi, a city with the highest air pollution, are prone to Lung cancer and breathing problems. If pollution issues are resolved, I must say people from the future will show high vulnerability to diseases. In conclusion, I completely agree with the fact that people from the future will lack good health as a result of bad food habits and the polluted environment.
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a lot of
differences in the lifestyles of the
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people
in the coming time. To be specific, wellness will deteriorate as time passes ahead. As I
strongly
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agree
with this statement, this essay will discuss the possible causes such as
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food
habits and pollution.

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begin
with, the main source of
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well being
of an individual is the
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food
that he eats. Earlier
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many
families
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used
to prefer homemade meals, which are in turn
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good
for
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health
, compared to
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fast
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food
or ready to cook varieties, high in unsaturated fats and preservatives that
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make
a person obese.
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But
this trend seems to be changing as both parents are working in most families and all members rely on outside sources for eating. This can
be exemplified
with school children eating unhealthy junk
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food
have higher chances of faltered
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health
in
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future
. I feel this, in turn,
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shows
how
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bad
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food
habits will cause weak
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health
in the coming era.

Another significant factor for the high
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health
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risks
in
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future
is the environment that surrounds us.
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People
from the
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old
generations
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used
to
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live
longer than
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today
’s population
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because
the environment was free from
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pollution
.
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But
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now
,
however
, research suggests that the air and water
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pollution
will reach its peak in the
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future
and it is capable of making humans
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very
sick. To
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describe
,
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people
living in Delhi, a city with the highest air
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pollution
, are prone to Lung cancer and breathing problems. If
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pollution
issues
are resolved
, I
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must
say
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people
from the
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future
will
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show
high vulnerability to diseases.

In conclusion
, I completely
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agree with the fact that
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people
from the
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future
will lack
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good
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health
as a result
of
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bad
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food
habits and the polluted environment.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay People's health will be lower in future then now. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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