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Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group, while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.4

Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group, while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. v. 4
Many people are of the opinion that group study is a better way for students to learn, whereas, some think that it is more beneficial to read in isolation. The essay below will discuss on both sides of the statement, as I will also highlight my personal view on the topic. Firstly, to attain a study goal is something that is very challenging. Unless one is ready to be fully dedicated to studying, and avoid unnecessary distractions like parties and hangouts, it will never be achieved. This can be better handled when it is a personal decision that does not involve managing other people's choice about it. For instance, a joint reading target might not be met just because, some members decide to have fun rather than sticking to the plan. This can be very difficult to cope with. On the other hand, coming together to learn and discuss by different individuals can be very helpful when all the parties involve are ready to give their best. During a collective lesson, people learn new ideas from others. Also, some faults or mistakes are corrected since it opens up an avenue for criticism and by so doing, a better result will be seen. A good example is a popular Scientist who was not able to pull through with his invention until he invited a few friends to his research who helped him to amend his wrongs and also brought in new ideas, which made it a success. If he didn't allow his colleagues in his work, maybe the project will still not be recorded as a successful one today. In conclusion, there are positive aspects to both a group study and also a personal study as analysed in the essay. Although, both sides have good argumentative points, I am very convinced that a group way of learning is still a better approach.
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are of the opinion that group
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is a
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way for students to learn, whereas,
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that it is more beneficial to read in isolation. The essay below will discuss on both sides of the statement, as I will
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highlight my personal view on the topic.

Firstly
, to attain a
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goal is something
that is
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very
challenging. Unless one is ready to be
fully
dedicated to studying, and avoid unnecessary distractions like parties and hangouts, it will never
be achieved
. This can be
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better
handled when it is a personal decision that does not involve managing other
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people
's choice about it.
For instance
, a joint reading target might not
be met
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just
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because
,
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some
members decide to have fun
rather
than sticking to the plan. This can be
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very
difficult to cope with.

On the other hand
, coming together to learn and discuss by
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different
individuals can be
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helpful when all the parties involve are ready to give their best. During a collective lesson,
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people
learn new
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ideas
from others.
Also
,
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faults or mistakes
are corrected
since it opens up an avenue for criticism and by
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doing, a
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result will be
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. A
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example is a popular Scientist who was not able to pull through with his invention until he invited a few friends to his research who
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helped
him to amend his wrongs and
also
brought in new
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ideas
, which made it a success. If he didn't
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allow
his colleagues in his work, maybe the project will
still
not
be recorded
as a successful one
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today
.

In conclusion
, there are
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positive
aspects to both a group
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study
and
also
a personal
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as
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in the essay. Although, both sides have
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argumentative points, I am
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convinced that a group way of learning is
still
a
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better
approach.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group, while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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