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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v.1

Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v. 1
It is undeniable that people today follow different fashion trends. Wearing fashionable outfits is even, liked by many and, this can be because it boosts confidence. However, I believe this is not a good thing as society is influenced by looks and it can create a partial environment. The confidence that comes with wearing attractive clothes is the reason why so many prefer wearing it. Famous people from the fashion industry wear the clothes that encourage their followers to wear it, too. This can, in turn, make people feel more confident as they look upon these fashion icons carry themselves with confidence. If people do not wear fashionable wearable, they may not feel good. No wonder people with simple clothes lack the aura of confidence. This preference for glamorous attire is not to be considered good as it can influence overall looks of a person and how society perceives it. People who wear fancy clothes look more appealing than those who do not. This can create partiality, for example, during a job interview; the one with fashionable formal outfit has a high chance of getting a job even though he is less deserving for that position. Just because a person is not in a fancy attire, society can sometimes look at him as poor, which I strongly look upon as bad thing. In conclusion, although most people prefer wearing fashionable clothes to boost self-confidence, this trend is inappropriate as the society can become partial towards these individuals and influence their judgment.
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people
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today
follow
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different
fashion trends. Wearing
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fashionable
outfits is even, liked by
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many
and, this can be
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because
it boosts confidence.
However
, I believe this is not a
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good
thing as
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society
is influenced
by
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looks
and it can create a partial environment.

The confidence that
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comes
with wearing attractive
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clothes
is the reason why
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so
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many
prefer wearing it.
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Famous
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people
from the fashion industry
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wear
the
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clothes
that encourage their followers to
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wear
it, too. This can, in turn,
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make
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people
feel more confident as they
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look
upon these fashion icons carry themselves with confidence. If
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people
do not
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wear
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fashionable
wearable, they may not feel
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good
. No wonder
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people
with simple
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clothes
lack the aura of confidence.

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be considered
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good
as it can influence
overall
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looks
of a person and how
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society
perceives it.
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People
who
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wear
fancy
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clothes
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look
more appealing than those who do not. This can create partiality,
for example
, during a job interview; the one with
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fashionable
formal outfit has a high chance of getting a job
even though
he is less deserving for that position.
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Just
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because
a person is not in a fancy attire,
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society
can
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sometimes
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look
at him as poor, which I
strongly
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look
upon as
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bad
thing.

In conclusion
, although most
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people
prefer wearing
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fashionable
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clothes
to boost self-confidence, this trend is inappropriate as the
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society
can become partial towards these individuals and influence their judgment.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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