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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. v.4

Many people obsess over the best way to utilise their free time. In my opinion, it is a better idea to use the free time balancing both stimulating and relaxation activities to maintain a healthy yet fulfilled life. To begin with, some people just love a good challenge. For these people, the definition of a perfect afternoon is being able to solve a challenging math problem or solving a particularly nasty sudoku puzzle. As an example from my own engineering college experience, I have met many such fine young men and women. They are often driven and work really hard. From my discussion with them, it was clear that they were exhilerated by being able to study and apply the challenging computer science curriculum. On the other hand, we have people who put in great work, but still advocate for a work-life balance. To these people, spending time with their family or doing hobbies that require minimal thinking is a great way of relieving the stress of their hectic jobs. For instance, at my office, I was greatly inspired by my mentor, who, inspite of being a senior software engineer, has an active life outside programming. He is an avid bird-watcher and photographer, has a good instagram following and maintains a healthy lifestyle by using a cycle to commute to work. I feel that relaxing and winding down after work helps him perform better at his job. In conclusion, I feel that both being gleeful at the prospect of solving challenging problems and having hobbies that help you cool off are essential to maintain your mind's best condition.
Many
people
obsess over the best way to
utilise
their free time. In my opinion, it is a better
idea
to
use
the free time balancing both stimulating and relaxation activities to maintain a healthy
yet
fulfilled life.

To
begin
with,
some
people
just
love
a
good
challenge. For these
people
, the definition of a perfect afternoon is being able to solve a challenging math problem or solving a
particularly
nasty
sudoku
puzzle. As an example from my
own
engineering college experience, I have met
many
such fine young
men
and women. They are
often
driven and
work
really
hard
. From my discussion with them, it was
clear
that they were
exhilerated
by being able to study and apply the challenging computer science curriculum.

On the other hand
, we have
people
who put in great
work
,
but
still
advocate for a work-life balance. To these
people
, spending time with their family or doing hobbies that require minimal thinking is a great way of relieving the
stress
of their hectic jobs.
For instance
, at my office, I was
greatly
inspired by my mentor, who,
inspite
of being a senior software engineer, has an active life outside programming. He is an avid bird-watcher and photographer, has a
good
instagram
following and maintains a healthy lifestyle by using a cycle to commute to
work
. I feel that relaxing and winding down after
work
helps
him perform better at his job.

In conclusion
, I feel that both being gleeful at the prospect of solving challenging problems and having hobbies that
help
you cool off are essential to maintain your mind's best condition.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Which one do you agree with?

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4 paragraphs
268 words
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