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Far too little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out. Why do people do so little about it? How can the problem be solved. v.1

Far too little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out. Why do people do so little about it? How can the problem be solved. v. 1
Many species of plants and animals have died out over the last few decades due to human activity and climate change. Most of the time, climate change leading to the extinction of wildlife is also a result of human activity; yet, humans are not doing much to save these flora and fauna. The main reason for this indifferent attitude is the lack of understanding of the way the ecosystem works. Creating awareness is the only solution. Humans are not doing anything to save wildlife because they are under the impression that the universe is created for them. They believe that other forms of life were created to benefit them. Consequently, they do not see any reason to protect them. They kill them for food and to satisfy their greed. For example, animals like tigers and crocodiles are killed for their skin. Elephants are killed for their tusks. Animals are also used in medical research and this causes permanent damage to them; yet, humans do not find anything morally wrong about this practice. Most people seem to be under the notion that if they are rich they can live comfortably on this planet even after all the plants and animals have died. Unfortunately, they do not realize that any disruption to the food chain will threaten their very existence. Creating awareness is the need of the hour. People should be sensitized about the damage they are doing to themselves by abusing wildlife. Right from primary school, children should be taught to respect and conserve all forms of life. Until we realize that we are threatening our own existence by allowing other forms of life to die we will have no motivation to act. In conclusion, human beings are not doing anything to save other forms of life because they do not see any value in it. Creating awareness is the only way to nudge them to act.
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Many
species of plants and
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animals
have
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died
out over the last few decades due to
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human
activity and climate
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change
. Most of the time, climate
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change
leading to the extinction of wildlife is
also
a result of
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human
activity;
yet
,
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humans
are not
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doing
much to save
Did you mean "this flora" or "these florae", "these floras"?
these flora
and fauna. The main reason for this indifferent attitude is the lack of understanding of the way the ecosystem works. Creating awareness is the
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only
solution.

Humans are not
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doing
anything to save wildlife
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because
they are under the impression that the universe
is created
for them. They believe that other
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forms
of
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life
were created
to benefit them.
Consequently
, they do not
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see
any reason to protect them. They kill them for food and to satisfy their greed.
For example
,
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animals
like tigers and crocodiles
are killed
for their skin. Elephants
are killed
for their tusks.
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Animals
are
also
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used
in medical research and this causes permanent damage to them;
yet
,
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humans
do not find anything
morally
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wrong
about this practice. Most
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people
seem to be under the notion that if they are rich they can
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live
comfortably
on this planet even
after all
the plants and
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animals
have
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died
. Unfortunately, they do not realize that any disruption to the food chain will threaten their
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very
existence.

Creating awareness is the need of the hour.
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People
should
be sensitized
about the damage they are
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doing
to themselves by abusing wildlife. Right from primary school, children should
be taught
to respect and conserve all
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forms
of
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life
.
“Until” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Until
we realize that we are threatening our
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own
existence by allowing other
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forms
of
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life
to
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die
we will have no motivation to act.

In conclusion
,
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human
beings are not
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doing
anything to save other
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forms
of
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life
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because
they do not
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see
any value in it. Creating awareness is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
way to nudge them to act.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Far too little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out. Why do people do so little about it? How can the problem be solved. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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