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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.11

Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. v. 11
Some individuals contend that spare time should be spent on some healthy indoor activities such as reading and doing scrabble whereas others are inclined to the view that it is essential to rest without intentionally having any thoughts to recharge the mind. This essay will discuss both sides of this contentious argument and then I will give my own perspectives. To begin with, reading and playing word games are effective ways for stress reduction. No matter how much stress we face in daily life, the stress may just slip away when we lose ourselves in a great story of a book or concentrate on solving the word puzzles. Reading helps to distract us from the tension we face and keeps us in the present moment. In addition, these activities foster cognitive stimulation. Studies have shown that staying mentally active through activities such as reading and doing word puzzles preclude us from losing brain power and reduce the progress of Dementia. Just like any other muscle in our body, brain muscle needs to be exercised to stay active. On the flip side, it is essential to not think about anything and give our mind some rest whenever we can. When we keep ourselves away from discursive thinking, it enhances our awareness and senses to engage with the surroundings without the burden to analyse every situation we observe and encounter. For instance, we always feel recharged and enter a state of peace and tranquillity when we rest our mind doing nothing especially after a busy day at work. In conclusion, reading, solving word puzzles and keeping our mind free during leisure period bring merits to enhance the mind. Engaging in such activities is good for enhancing our creativity and cognitive skills. By contrast, resting the mind by doing nothing is a better way to beat stress.
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scrabble whereas others
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mind
. This essay will discuss both sides of this contentious argument and then I will give my
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own
perspectives.

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and playing
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games are effective ways for
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reduction. No matter how much
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stress
we face in daily life, the
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may
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slip away when we lose ourselves in a great story of a book or concentrate on solving the
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puzzles.
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Reading
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helps
to distract us from the tension we face and
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us in the present moment.
In addition
, these
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foster cognitive stimulation. Studies have shown that staying mentally active through
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activities
such as
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reading
and
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doing
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puzzles preclude us from losing brain power and
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reduce
the progress of Dementia.
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On the flip side, it is essential to not
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about anything and give our
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rest whenever we can. When we
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keep
ourselves away from discursive thinking, it enhances our awareness and senses to engage with the surroundings without the burden to
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every situation we observe and encounter.
For instance
, we always feel recharged and enter a state of peace and
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tranquillity
when we rest our
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mind
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doing
nothing
especially
after a busy day at work.

In conclusion
,
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reading
, solving
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word
puzzles and keeping our
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mind
free during leisure period bring merits to enhance the
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mind
. Engaging in such
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activities
is
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good
for enhancing our creativity and cognitive
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skills
. By contrast, resting the
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mind
by
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doing
nothing is a better way to beat
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stress
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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