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Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programs. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. v.1

Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programs. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. v. 1
It is true that some people favour importing movies and TV shows from overseas, rather than attempting to produce these within their own country. While many people suppose consider that such imports make a valuable contribution to national culture, I would argue that it is necessary to promote a local entertainment industry. On the one hand, local movies and TV programmes benefit national culture in two important ways. From an educational perspective, the young can learn about their country‟s past, stimulating their interest and national pride. For instance, instead of studying history from boring textbooks, students nowadays are able to learn about their nation‟s history by watching locally-made documentaries or movies. From an entertainment perspective, local TV shows and films are relevant to everyday experiences and a familiar way of life. Even when copyright ideas from other countries are used, local producers can adapt these to make shows such as a Vietnamese version of The Voice or The Next Top Model. On the other hand, I believe that international movies and TV programmes can also benefit the cultural life of a country. Firstly, people are able to understand something of the life and culture of other countries, which they can simply enjoy as entertainment or adventure. The American film ‘Titanic’ for example, is not only a disaster movie, but also gives an idea about the history of emigration from Europe to the USA. Secondly, foreign movies and TV shows help many people to improve their language skills, combining learning and enjoyment. Many Vietnamese students, for example, have benefited from watching TV series such as Friends. In conclusion, although international movies and TV programmes contribute to the diversity of a country‟s culture, it seems to me that local film and TV industries should also be supported owing to their roles as education and entertainment providers.
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importing
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movies
and TV
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shows
from overseas,
rather
than attempting to produce these within their
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own
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country
. While
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many
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people
suppose consider that such imports
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make
a valuable contribution to national
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culture
, I would argue that it is necessary to promote a
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local
entertainment industry.

On the one hand,
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local
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movies
and TV
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programmes
benefit national
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culture
in two
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important
ways. From an educational perspective, the young can learn about their
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country‟s
past, stimulating their interest and national pride.
For instance
,
instead
of studying history from boring textbooks, students nowadays are able to learn about their
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nation‟s
history by watching
locally
-made documentaries or
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movies
. From an entertainment perspective,
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local
TV
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shows
and films are relevant to everyday experiences and a familiar way of life. Even when copyright
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ideas
from other
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countries
are
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used
,
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local
producers can adapt these to
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make
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shows
such as a Vietnamese version of The Voice or The
Next
Top Model.

On the other hand
, I believe that international
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movies
and TV
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programmes
can
also
benefit the cultural life of a
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country
.
Firstly
,
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people
are able to understand something of the life and
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culture
of other
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countries
, which they can
simply
enjoy as entertainment or adventure. The American film ‘Titanic’
for example
, is not
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only
a disaster
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movie
,
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but
also
gives an
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idea
about the history of emigration from Europe to the USA.
Secondly
, foreign
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movies
and TV
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shows
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help
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many
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people
to
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improve
their language
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skills
, combining learning and enjoyment.
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Many
Vietnamese students,
for example
, have benefited from watching TV series such as Friends.

In conclusion
, although international
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movies
and TV
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programmes
contribute to the diversity of a
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country‟s
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culture
, it seems to me that
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local
film and TV industries should
also
be supported
owing to their roles as education and entertainment providers.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programs. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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